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mia
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0 posted 08-05-99 06:23 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mia

I'm letting you slip
run like ocean water
between my frozen fingers
you fall to the ground
and the earth
absorbs your wetness
I dig my fingers
into your chest
to fertilize the soil
that is your heart
You breathe,
you can't stop breathing
and I linger
for I know that this moment
like all others
will pass
and I will be left
to remember when
I let you go
because I loved you
too damn much
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evolution
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ma, usa


1 posted 08-05-99 07:07 PM       View Profile for evolution   Email evolution   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for evolution

hey, send me your email address
Poetwheel
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2 posted 08-05-99 07:19 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Mia, I liked this poem. It was powerful but it kind of depressed me. Perhaps that was the point, though.

Good job. (cheer up

PW
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Veyr strong piece......excellent writing!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Alain DeLaCendres
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4 posted 08-05-99 10:54 PM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

Très bien, the ending flows a bit better now than it did when you posted this one as "untitled". Very nice mia.

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
 
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