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I thought you were asleep

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Colin
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since 06-05-99
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Callington, Cornwall, England


0 posted 08-05-99 09:00 AM       View Profile for Colin   Email Colin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Colin

I thought you were asleep
that starry february night
as I slowly
carefully
untangled your arms from mine.

I thought you were asleep
when I gently
nervously
rolled you to your back

I thought you were asleep
as I looked down at you
and drank in your beauty

I thought you were asleep
still
as I whispered to you
softly
telling you what I saw
they way your eyebrows curve
the shape of your nose
how you smile when you sleep with me

I thought you were asleep
when you turned back into me
arm sliding over
almost lazily to my chest

I thought you were asleep
as I kissed you
there
on your forehead
and said I love you

I thought you were asleep.
© Copyright 1999 Colin Ramage - All Rights Reserved
Lucie
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since 06-20-99
Posts 1123
Houston


1 posted 08-05-99 09:14 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I liked this poem.. I remember telling someone I loved them while they slept. To afraid to claim it while they were awake.
IsabelleSkye
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since 06-27-99
Posts 262


2 posted 08-05-99 09:21 AM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

I am left speechless. This brought tears to my eyes, Eric.
I.Skye
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 08-05-99 07:37 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

My, my...what a beautiful piece of work here.

I thought you were asleep
when I professed my love
with quite whispers and soft kisses
and as I kissed the sleep from your eyes
I realized that you'd heard everything

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
thursdayschild
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since 07-01-99
Posts 174
Houston, Tx.


4 posted 08-06-99 12:42 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Oh, this is beautiful! Loved it.
Christopher
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since 08-02-99
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Purgatorial Incarceration


5 posted 08-06-99 01:02 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ok, maybe I'm sick (go ahead) but at first I thought she was dead. I'm glad that she isn't (I hope!) because this was beautiful yet in a way sad, maybe because I've been there too, afraid to speak the truth out loud.

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Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars.
-Unknown-
So let the sun beat down upon my face,
It's warmth will dry my tears.
Cinderella
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since 06-23-99
Posts 157
Arizona


6 posted 08-06-99 04:23 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

Whether it be February or July,
Love like this would make me cry!
angel girl
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since 07-23-99
Posts 329
within a whisper...


7 posted 08-06-99 04:29 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

wow, i can tell that your love for this woman is really strong. nicely done.


[This message has been edited by angel girl (edited 08-06-99).]
ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


8 posted 08-06-99 12:58 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

If this is what you do while she's asleep...i don't want to think of what you do when she's awake...beautiful...
Colin
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since 06-05-99
Posts 612
Callington, Cornwall, England


9 posted 08-09-99 05:13 PM       View Profile for Colin   Email Colin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Colin

Hi everyone. I would just like to thank you all for taking the time to read this, and even more for the time taken to reply to it. This poem is very special to me. It's about a very special woman and a very special time in my life.

I doubt if I'll be posting here for a while now, so I'd also like to thank those who have posted there works here. I'm sorry if I havent replied to your works, but there are so many great poems come on here each day I wouldn't know where to start! Please believe me when I say that there is a lot of talent in this forum and I have been touched by many of the words I have read. I guess that's it for now...

I'll prolly put a poem up some time when I've got something to say, but for now, goodbye my friends.
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


10 posted 08-13-99 01:09 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Eric, you haven't asked us if you could leave...what makes you think you can abandon us like that with no reason?? You can't GO anywhere - you belong here with us !! Is Izzy gone too?

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

passing shadows
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displaced


11 posted 04-20-2004 04:15 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

oh wow! what a write!
 
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