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elvira
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[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]
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Oh....I like this one even better!!!

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Very, very nice elvira.
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I like this! It has a unique rythm that just flows!!!

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Very nice, Elvira....
...and - Never apologize for rhyming...
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I like! Great job!
elvira
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[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]
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Lady E, I read both, and yes they belong together. I like the difference in feel from the negative side in free verse to the positive in rhyme. I'm not sure if this would be coming at it a little high, but I think they should be posted as one. Enjoyable as always.
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For the record - This poem is written in flawless meter..
You have alternating lines of:
iambic (short/long)
tetrameter (four feet) and dimeter (two feet)......
Nice job!!

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Well, there you have it. You are short/long and have two feet/four feet.....and, not to mention, a pair of excellent poems. Very nicely done, Elvira.
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[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]
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Great job in covering all those senses here in just a few words...
elvira
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[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]
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after reading this it left me with a nice tingly sensation...great work elvira.
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[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-22-99).]
 
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