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Dark Angel
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0 posted 1999-08-04 06:37 AM




All night long
Laying awake
Trying to figure out
What I’ve done wrong

You know I love you
And I know you love me
But honey I can’t see
What has gone wrong

At work I can’t concentrate
And at night, I stay up late
Angry at you
For making me feel this way

Babe, my hopes were way over my head
Now they’re down on the ground instead
I thought there was some kind of future
But I guess it was a dream
And not all things are what they seem

I know you love me
You know I love you
But there is nothing left for me to show
And nothing left for me to do
But to let you go

But I swear
I’ll never forget you
And you will see
I’ll walk beside you
For eternity

© Copyright 1999 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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1 posted 1999-08-04 10:14 AM


Nice poem....for a cop-out. What you are really saying is that you no longer "like" her. True love keeps going.... Maybe I am being overly critical because everything hinges on what you mean by "let you go." I still believe the poet is giving up way too soon.

INclan

Dark Angel
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2 posted 1999-08-05 01:48 AM


INclan, thank you. maybe I am giving up, But I still love her and I will forever
Justbleu
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3 posted 2000-07-17 11:46 AM


I hope it all worked out for you!!  
Dark one I was digging around the archives and found this...liked it!!  Take Care!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Severn
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4 posted 2001-05-06 10:31 AM


wow Mmy...and haven't you grown since this was posted...

lol..remember explanation marks???

Heheh...

hugs you...fun to read this dear.

K

(and to think I didn't know you then...wow...a lot has changed my friend yes?)

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2001-05-17 10:17 PM


Ohh GOSH!!  hehehe

blushing lol

yes I have grown oh Lordy.
I don't even rhyme anymore

but am going to work on that.

Thanks Hon

for the laugh.

oh the exclamation marks heheheyes how can I forget, you certainly snapped me out of them quick smart hey?

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
6 posted 2001-05-17 10:30 PM


you really have changed your style Mmy---
and K-- you will have to explain to me what an "explanation" mark is sometime---
Hugsu2

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Severn
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7 posted 2001-05-17 11:30 PM


Er...um...explanation marks are um cousins to exclamation marks and Maree used to use them a LOT.

Can't show you one - it's not on MY keyboard..in fact, I think explanation marks are really an Australian thing.

So there.

K

Dark Angel
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8 posted 2001-05-17 11:38 PM


Explanation Marks are not a cousin to the exclamation mark, they are merely the stuff up from a certain Kiwi poet ROFL

heheh Kamla

Severn
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9 posted 2001-05-17 11:45 PM


BOLLOCKS!

Now - THAT'S Kiwi.

Heh

K

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
10 posted 2001-05-17 11:47 PM


No that is Kiwi K

heh

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Severn
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11 posted 2001-05-17 11:52 PM


~splutter~

WHAT???

Grrrrrrrrrr..you wait Mr...you'll see..you'll see...

K says futilely..


Dark Angel
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12 posted 2001-05-17 11:57 PM


LOL@Jamsey   hahaha
Severn
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13 posted 2001-05-17 11:59 PM


JAMSEY??

ROTF - HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA

Here Jamsey...sounds like a Sheep dog's name!

HAHAHAHAAAA

Smirk

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
14 posted 2001-05-18 12:04 PM


~shrug~ better a sheep dog name than a cat name.....heh
Severn
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15 posted 2001-05-18 12:07 PM


LOW BLOW
LOW BLOW

UNFAIR

You are disqualified and I win.

So there.

champion K

Dark Angel
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16 posted 2001-05-18 12:12 PM


Jamsey

Jovial
Adventurous
Marvellous
Sexy
Endearing
Youthful

  K

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-18-2001).]

Dark Angel
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17 posted 2001-05-18 12:13 PM


Now tell me that doesnt suit him K  hehe
Severn
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18 posted 2001-05-18 12:13 PM


Stay away from my sheep dog growls K...

K

Dark Angel
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19 posted 2001-05-18 12:16 PM


HA

NEVERRRRRRRR


LOL

Severn
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20 posted 2001-05-18 12:20 PM


Oh yeah?

Whatcha gonna do about it?

Huh huh?

Wanna a fight do ya?
Remember - who dislocates people's shoulders in tickle fights? YEAH ME.. (but don't tell J or he won't let me come back haha)...

AND you spelled marvellous wrong so there.

K



Dark Angel
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21 posted 2001-05-18 01:17 AM


"Wanna a fight do ya?"

Now does the "a" really belong there K ?

sheeesh LOL

Severn
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22 posted 2001-05-18 01:36 AM


AAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH

I have nothing to say.

Nothing!

'0000000000000000000000000000'

bother

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