How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #1 Archive
 Loss
 1 2 3 4 5
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Loss

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Sue
Member
since 08-04-99
Posts 407
France


0 posted 08-04-99 04:33 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sue

I see you in the dark, and in the light
you're in the very air
you fill my days, you're in my dreams at night
you're everywhere

I know your voice, each sweet familiar tone
and in the evening chill
and quiet night-time hours when I'm alone
I hear you still

I feel you, holding me against your heart
I hear your breathing there
but all you are, since we have been apart
is empty air

I feel you in the heat, and in the cold
you're in the sun and rain
you fill my life, with you I shall grow old
and with my pain

I see you in the dark, and in the light
you're in the very air
you fill my days, you're in my dreams at night
but you're not there


© Copyright 1999 Sue - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


1 posted 08-04-99 10:32 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow, that one is a tear jerker....very nicely written, the format works well for this piece, with the second and fourth line of each stanza being accented because of it's length.

------------------
"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Sue
Member
since 08-04-99
Posts 407
France


2 posted 08-11-99 10:23 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Thanks very much, Hoot.
I've brought this one forward again because it means a lot to me, and I would be very grateful for some more responses. I hope I will be forgiven.
Craig
Senior Member
since 06-10-99
Posts 882


3 posted 08-11-99 04:25 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig



I waited a while, but I can not wait any longer....

Superb Poem and a fine job well done.

Now back to the top so the others can read it too.
Sue
Member
since 08-04-99
Posts 407
France


4 posted 08-12-99 03:21 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Craig, you are so kind, thank you very much.
angel girl
Member
since 07-23-99
Posts 329
within a whisper...


5 posted 08-12-99 04:33 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

Nice job. I can relate.

------------------
One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.
-William Shakespeare

Sue will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #1 >> Loss Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors