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I Wanna Be

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TSU325
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since 08-04-99
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Detroit, Michigan, USA


0 posted 08-04-99 02:08 AM       View Profile for TSU325   Email TSU325   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TSU325

I wanna be the woman,
You see when you are sleep.
I wanna be the woman,
who makes you feel so weak.
I wanna be the woman,
Who make you feel complete.
I wanna be the woman,
Who makes your passion rise,
I wanna be the woman,
You kiss between the thys.
I wanna be your everything,
And set your heart afire.
I wanna be the woman,
The one which you desire.
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Augchic711
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O'Fallon, IL, USA


1 posted 08-04-99 08:13 AM       View Profile for Augchic711   Email Augchic711   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Augchic711

This poem is so wonderful you captivate the total desire one has for a person and how much your heart just flows out to that person. I enjoyed reading your poetry and hope that you will continue to write. Thank you for sharing this with us.

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hoot_owl_rn
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This is a extreamly nice poem...a very good idea... be careful of the little mistakes though.....see what you think of this:

I wanna be the woman,
You see when you're asleep.
I wanna be the woman,
who makes you feel so weak.
(I wanna be the woman,
With kisses that you greet.)
I wanna be the woman,
Who makes you feel complete.
I wanna be the woman,
Who makes your passion rise,
I wanna be the woman,
You kiss between the thighs.
I wanna be your everything,
And set your heart afire.
I wanna be the woman,
The one which you desire.


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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Cinderella
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since 06-23-99
Posts 157
Arizona


3 posted 08-04-99 10:37 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

"Hoot" you did wonders, but the subject matter is what counts! I would love to be this woman and perhaps someday will be lucky enough to find "Mr. Right", or perhaps I have found him but don't know it? Thank you both.
Toerag
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since 07-29-99
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4 posted 08-04-99 10:39 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

If he kissed ya once will he kiss ya again?....Be sure...with Pristine feminine hygiene spray!!!!!.....
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