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Daddy, i wanna watch the planes fly

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redwriter1
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since 07-22-99
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Franklin, TN


0 posted 08-03-99 09:40 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

This is a true story of a grave site I came across in Arizona. Researched the archives and only found bits and pieces.. but.. this little boy is remembered here. I asked why there were little toy planes above his grave and his sister said.. because he loved to watch the planes fly.. (hence the paupers cemetary is next to a small airport)
He died of polio.. (but they didn't know what it was at the time. 1932)


Daddy I wanna watch the planes fly
taking off up to the sky
I wonder where they go
Daddy do you know

My legs are hurtin Daddy pick me up
I can't see over that pick up truck
ohhh I see it now
heading for the clouds

There's a rusty white gate next to the runway
that's where all the angels go
when they can't pay
Children and babies only hours old
scattered about
underneath the road

Daddy I promise I'll behave
take me out to the field today
you know that I'll be good
and he always would

I can't walk to far in the snow
Carry me Daddy lets go home
and he's lift him up
and he'd never know

Daniel Keenan's daddy was
a miner in the west
Poor but proud he put his son to rest
out where he could watch the planes go by
and everyone would see
he loved to watch them fly

Daddy I wanna watch the planes fly
takin off up to the sky
I wonder where they go
Daddy do you know
My legs are hurtin Daddy pick me up
I can't see over that pick up truck
oh I see it now
heading for the clouds

at the rusty white gate
next to the runway
You'll see three toy planes
suspended in the air
Daniel's daddy didn't take the chance
if noone else could see the planes
he made sure that Daniel can....

Daddy I wanna watch the planes fly
Daddy I wanna watch the planes fly..

(it's really a song.. but.. I wanted to post it anyway, hope you all don't mind)



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Kay-lynn
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Sally S.
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since 06-07-99
Posts 887
Ohio


1 posted 08-03-99 09:48 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

This was very touching. Don't worry about the fact of it being a song. You know, some of the best songs were originally poems.
redwriter1
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since 07-22-99
Posts 476
Franklin, TN


2 posted 08-03-99 09:51 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Thank you sally. This song is very close to my heart and took over 4 years to write. (who'd have thought?)

is it allowed to post a music link? If so. I would love for you all to hear the "real" thing. But if not. that's fine.

thanks again Sally

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Kay-lynn
elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
California


3 posted 08-03-99 10:27 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

there is nothing sadder than using a loved one...especially a child, i gather...what a loving father you portrayed in this poem

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...Music to my Ears...hoarse whispers...just watching tv...Feel the need?...serving wench...Tribute to M.J....take a guess...sink or swim
...stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...life is like...insomnia...devotion...07-20-69...craving...
Master...chat?...apart...plain...vice...shameless self promotion

poohbear
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since 08-02-99
Posts 42
piedmont,sc


4 posted 08-04-99 12:52 AM       View Profile for poohbear   Email poohbear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poohbear

so touching and so sweet, felt moisture in my eye.
has this ever been recorded?
if so how can i get a copy?

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


5 posted 08-04-99 10:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very beautifully written, this is expressed so nicely.....it truly touches ones heart!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Andrew Scott
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since 06-24-99
Posts 2655
Redlands,CA,USA


6 posted 08-04-99 12:51 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Such a wonderful, heartfelt tribute you have written. I'm sure Daniel is appreciative of your efforts. I know I am.

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 08-04-99).]
redwriter1
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since 07-22-99
Posts 476
Franklin, TN


7 posted 08-04-99 01:30 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

I'm truly amazed that the message got through. Most people probably would have walked by that little boys grave. Now, a few more people will remember him.

Thank you all for your comments.(smile)
graham
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since 07-31-99
Posts 62
South Yorkshire, England


8 posted 08-05-99 10:21 AM       View Profile for graham   Email graham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for graham

It paints such a sad picture..truly touching
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