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redwriter1
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0 posted 08-03-99 08:58 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

(written when I was 15, my first actual finished piece of anything, but I still like it, tell me if you think I should make it into a song).. thanks

Through my mother's eyes were seen the days
of Christmas's gone by
When all her children came in haste
to gather by her side

No tree this year my little ones
she would apologize
Though we all hoped it wasn't true
Your mother doesn't lie

Through my mother's eyes was see a tree
with Christmas lights so bright
But it would need a little help
to make it look just right

It's not much, she said, but it will do
We'll have a Christmas tree
And it will be the best of all
You just wait and see

It was oddly shaped and very small
but beautiful indeed
Even thought our Christmas tree
was just a tumble weed

Though time went by and years between
I still recall the sighs
When we all saw a Christmas tree
Through my mother's eyes.

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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 08-03-99 09:03 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Absolutely wonderful!!! I loved this one, thanks for posting it. It really works and a song? quite possibly!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
redwriter1
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2 posted 08-03-99 09:06 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

I'm glad you like it. It's supposed to be a true story.. according to my mother.. and hey.. if you can't trust your mother who can you trust?? (smile)

but even if I don't remember being there, I still see the whole thing through her eyes.. the master story teller. ...
Balladeer
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3 posted 08-03-99 09:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Beautiful, Red. A heart-touching ballad that would make an excellent song, in my opinion.
redwriter1
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4 posted 08-03-99 09:46 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

thank you Balladeer.. I was hoping. someone would read the ramblings of a 15 year old. Even though i'm now 36.. I re-read this often and think.. I can't believe I wrote that.!..you're very kind
elvira
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5 posted 08-03-99 10:12 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

lucky you saved your teen poetry, redwriter1...i didn't and still regret it...this was a lovely poem


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Delores Hall
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6 posted 08-04-99 10:45 AM       View Profile for Delores Hall   Email Delores Hall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delores Hall

Nice poem.At that age most kids can't see
thru their mothers eyes.As far as making it
a song.I don't know.If it's something you
want to do go for it.
graham
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7 posted 08-05-99 10:25 AM       View Profile for graham   Email graham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for graham

The ability to see through anothers eyes is an amazing gift. To be able to write about that is truly wonderful. I loved it!
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