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Emmy
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 194
KY

0 posted 1999-08-03 08:56 PM


I'll sing a song of sympathy
for those who have loved and lost
I know how it feels to give all you've got
and still have to pay the cost
I'll sing a song of understanding
for those who can't let go
I knew how it feels to find love in a knot
when you thought you just tied a bow
I'll sing a song of sorrow
for those with broken hearts
I know how it feels when love shatters
and you have to pick up the parts
I'll sing a song of pain
for those who have to choose
I know how it feels to have to decide
when either way you lose
I'll sing a song of shedded tears
for those who all too often cry
I know how it feels when it's just to much
and you want to lay down and just die
I'll sing a song of hope
for those who are moving on
I know how it feels to want to give up...
but then the triumph in seeing the dawn.

[This message has been edited by Emmy (edited 08-03-99).]

[This message has been edited by Emmy (edited 08-03-99).]

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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 1999-08-03 09:00 PM


Emmy....this is a wonderful message and your rhyme is almost perfect....my only suggestion would be to smoothen out the flow just a bit on a few lines, very easily done.
Nice work!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

elvira
Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
California
2 posted 1999-08-03 09:43 PM


what a lovely sentiment, Emmy...i guess we have all been in those situations at one time or another


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...stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...life is like...insomnia...devotion...07-20-69...craving...
Master...chat?...apart...plain...vice...shameless self promotion

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