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suthern
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0 posted 1999-08-03 08:52 PM


Thoughts of aging weigh me down
My great big feet just drag...
I just passed a full length mirror
And saw how my ass sags!
Boobs drifted deep south years ago -
Succumbed to cruel gravity.
My navel rests between the pair
To grace my pudgy tummy.
Deep crevices called wrinkles
Surround my lips and eyes.
And when did these barrels take the place
Of my once decent thighs?
If I sit too long, an aching starts
Within my lower back,
But if I walk, then each step brings
From one or both knees CRACK!
Without split ends and covered gray,
My hair would cease to exist.
The makeup doesn’t even cover the flaws.
I’m not sure why I persist?
My disposition, once so sweet,
Has lost out to despair.
So stay put on those bar stools, guys.
I simply do not care!


© Copyright 1999 suthern - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 1999-08-03 09:15 PM


I'm a little confused? Are you a topless dancer in a bar? Is that what you mean by telling the guys to stay put on their bar stools? (lol) This was painfully cute. Now, if you'll excuse me Ms. Loreal awaits!

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2 posted 1999-08-03 09:25 PM


Suthern, I know for a fact it's not this bad honey...so tell it like it is next time...great words and story though.
suthern
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3 posted 1999-08-03 09:35 PM


Thank you, deVine one! *G* (I should have added... can't dance worth diddly! LOL)

Lor: OK, so my hair isn't gray... just a teensy exaggeration? LOL. But my sister took some pictures this weekend to send to sweet Toe... and the rest, unfortunately, is all too accurate! *G*

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4 posted 1999-08-03 09:43 PM


Can't speak for the outside, Suthern, but you seem to be a hell of a gal on the inside. That counts.
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5 posted 1999-08-04 09:27 AM


Balladeer....She is quite a gal on the outside too.....and though I haven't been "inside" of her yet....I think that's probably pretty good also....LOL.....Oh, wait, you mean her heart and mind don't ya?....Ummmm....never mind....that's obvious!
suthern
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6 posted 1999-08-04 09:41 AM


Balladeer: Thank you, kind sir!

Toerag: So what are you waiting for... an engraved invitation? ROFL! SMOOCH, sweetie... and thanks!

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7 posted 2007-06-03 02:11 AM


:: Laughs ::

And years later, this lady is simply more beautiful!

Alison

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8 posted 2007-11-12 08:58 PM


lovely

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