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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 1999-08-03 12:38 PM


Surrounded by life, my own death I mourn.
Too young to die, yet from my life I was torn.
My eyes so blank, still stare from my skull.
The bustle of others, their tears rend my soul.
Why, oh why, did it have to happen to me?
I drank only one, perhaps two, maybe three!
I swear on my grave, the one I'll see soon!
It'll never happen again, if I'm granted a boon.
But there's dirt in my face! Help, I can't breathe!
No wait everybody, please stay, don't leave!
Shall I then pay so much, and for oh-so long?
One night of pleasure, please, I know I was wrong.
Fine then, go, and leave me here as I lay.
For my memory might stop another, somehow, someday.


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Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars.
-Unknown-

© Copyright 1999 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
elvira
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since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
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1 posted 1999-08-03 12:45 PM


drinking and driving certainly never mix...you addressed the consequences very well with this poem...sadly enough, despite all the statistics, many never learn...Welcome to the forum, Christopher


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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...Music to my Ears...hoarse whispers...just watching tv...Feel the need?...serving wench...Tribute to M.J....take a guess...sink or swim...
stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...insomnia...devotion...07-20-69...craving...Master...chat?
...apart...plain...vice...shameless self promotion



Christopher
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2 posted 1999-08-03 02:03 AM


I'm afraid you're right Elvira, but we can hope. I think more and more people are finding this an issue that touches home.
Thank you for the welcome. Though I've been writing all my life, this is my first opportunity to read from such a wealth of poets!
What I've read so far has made me want to work all that much harder at being better!

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Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars.
-Unknown-

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-08-03 08:39 AM


Excellent posting Christopher and a story lesson many could stand to learn. I had an aunt, a cousin and another of my cousins sons killed in an accident where a driver of a tractor trailer had been drinking. In a single instant, my cousin lost her mother, her sister and her son....all because of someones stupidity.
Welcome to the group!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
4 posted 1999-08-03 08:07 PM


Well done Christopher. I found your work here after my most recent posting (A Lucky Guy) and I'm right there with you. Keep 'em coming and welcome to the club.
Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
5 posted 1999-08-03 08:11 PM


A powerful message not to be taken lightly. Well done, Christopher.
Elizabeth
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6 posted 1999-08-22 05:22 PM


Welcome, Christopher! I am bringing this back up to the top-more people should see this. I hope to goodness it will make us think. Well done.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

7 posted 1999-10-21 02:32 AM


Well - was this your first one? What an entry! YOu already are better - what with ME to guide you - hahahahahahahah...!
Oscar Wilde
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since 2000-03-09
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San Francisco
8 posted 2000-03-31 07:38 PM


I was confused by your poem but when I read your signature, I realized what you are saying. Now I too will reach for the stars.
Thanks.

Your biggest fan,
O.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

9 posted 2004-01-16 11:52 AM


Wow.

Christopher rhymes???



Indeed, welcome to the forum, C!

*giggle*

I'm keeping this one!

(Seriously tho, was that so painful?)

and, yes, I love the signature...

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
10 posted 2004-01-16 12:58 PM


You had to bring this one up? You couldn't have found this one, or this one, or one of my favorites, this one?

*shaking head*

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2004-01-16 05:33 PM


shaking MY head...

I'm still jealous of the block format--I never could figure out how to do that. (and Midnight Blue to Dreaming is MY favorite)

and C? you know that madness IS my method--smile--was just reading and this one just caught me by surprise...

and I have noticed a bit of rhyme in your verse before, but I always knew you could dance.


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