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Shades At Night

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 08-02-99 07:32 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Andrew Scott

In your eyes I've seen
The setting sun on a sandy beach
The rising moon over desert heat

In your eyes I've seen
Love fulfilled and a caring heart
A puzzle finding its missing part

In your eyes I've seen
So many possibilities
The means to overcome probabilities

In your eyes I've seen
My life, my destiny
The best that would be me

So I ask you why
When the sun starts to fade
You've come to the point
Of putting on shades
© Copyright 1999 Andrew Scott - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 08-02-99 07:41 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellent! This could be deep with meaning... is she putting on shades in the twilight of the romance or the twilight of the day? Good!
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 08-02-99 07:42 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautifully stated. Very nice job with this one!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Andrew Scott
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3 posted 08-02-99 08:13 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Thank you ladies for stopping by. Devine one, I'm glad I accomplished that level of uncertainty. Its what I was aiming for although I thought the title might tip my hand early. Your praise is the coin of the realm.
Balladeer
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4 posted 08-02-99 08:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I do agree with deVine. The connection between the two is very well thought out and creates thought. Well done.
poohbear
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5 posted 08-02-99 09:01 PM       View Profile for poohbear   Email poohbear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poohbear

i agree with the others interesting ending to a peice that was devinly inspired...(ha ha)
actualy its a verrynice piece. as a new comer i wonder if this is normal practice for one writer to inspire another.
it has been said that the greatest form of flattery is to be copied. thanks for the flattery and the interesting twist.
poohbear
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6 posted 08-02-99 09:03 PM       View Profile for poohbear   Email poohbear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poohbear

i agree with the others interesting
ending to a peice that was devinly
inspired...(ha ha)
actualy its a verrynice piece. as a
new comer i wonder if this is normal
practice for one writer to inspire
another.
it has been said that the greatest
form of flattery is to be copied.
thanks for the flattery and the
interesting twist.
Andrew Scott
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7 posted 08-03-99 12:19 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Thank you Sir Balladeer, glad you enjoyed.

Poohbear: I admit, you inspired me to take a different direction with something I was already working on but could not seem to complete. Thank you! And yes, I think there is a lot of inspiration to be gained within these poetic halls. Happy Reading!
JP
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8 posted 08-03-99 12:28 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Mr. Scott, Mr. Scott, Mr. Scott....

Extremely clever and ingeniously done. The simplistic pattern completely unprepared me for the depth of the metaphor. I've read it a few times and have come up with a different meaning each time - this is what good poetry is to me.

Nosce te ipsum
JP
Sally S.
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9 posted 08-03-99 12:56 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

First, I thought...Oh, this is a pretty poem. Then....hmmmmm...definitely thought provoking and can be interpreted in a couple different ways. Man, I love poetry!! Great work, Andrew!
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10 posted 08-03-99 03:42 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Covering those windows to the soul... I like! *G*
Andrew Scott
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11 posted 08-03-99 04:33 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

JP: Thank you very much. That I was able to create such a response is most encouraging. Glad you enjoyed.

Sally: Thank you for stopping by, your words are much appreciated.

Suthern: That's where I was originally headed with this piece. Thanks for coming by.
aziza
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12 posted 06-03-2007 02:02 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

Definitely felt like she was shading her soul.  Very nice poem ~ glad it jumped in my way and tripped me up to read it.

A
Artic Wind
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13 posted 11-12-2007 08:57 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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