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A Tale Of Tales |
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Jocular_Jockie Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 11 |
Locked tight in a box bound by chains and never to escape. Another world another time the world of a dreamer, a boy things only one could imagine. Hidden delights and annew mystery under every fallen leaf. A sapphire sky silhouetted with gold, metamorphic landscapes and optical waters blanket over the land. The mountain is whre our tale begins abode of the Great Rathi, dragon by nature devil by nurture. An emerald scaled body. Long jaded wings spread out revealing his huge form. Fire, is his eyes blinding stinging his diamond studded tail could split hairs into thirds. Spacious enough home has he reminiscent battles of yore. Tar thick tree forests illusious magical? for the old Dryad. Hair blindingly white robes of silver and gold fall from frailty of her age forsaken carcass untold secrets hidden inside cleverness is her weapon and she uses it well. An island of rocks embedded in fog is where we may view Leviathan. ludicrously enormous. In contrast to his mouth his eyes seem like gnats yellow and pulpy and aqua, rough skin entwined with the water. We come to a shawdowy mud-ridden black swamp reeking of mildew Juzam Dijunn proudly watches over this land. Ember eyes glowing forever observent. Of a golden nose ring and ebony horns his green, wrinkled skin oozing from his limp bones. No victims currently hung from his bloody nose ring. Increasing power from every victorious spar. Self proclaimed the "invincible". One dreary night a battle of epic proportions imminent. A war between Juzam Rathi, Dryad, and Leviathan becuase of untrustworthy power used to destroy lands to kill harmless creatures. Dryad attempts first blood with the swing of her arm a spell is cast alive with rage throws Juzam to the mountain Rathi dives down his tail swinging behind him and scoops up Juzam up into the black clouds that covers the land lightning sizzling down pounding rain. Rathi's silver judded claws dig deep into Juzam before he drops him into the mouth of Leviathan. Yelling with agony Juzam's long life flashes before him as the teeth crush his bones. The Leviathan looks up to the sky and shoots the remains unseen to this day. The battle is over the world is safe yet again. The Rathi Dragon stands proud on his humble abode lightning jagging all around him his azure eyes staring up to his ancestors before. The Dryad is hunched over her many books reading drinking the knowledge like water. The Leviathan sleeps in his cave resting from his battle still trying to get that aweful taste from his mouth. The boy amazed at his own story now has a tale of tales to share with everyone for the bounds have been broken. Written by: Seth Adams ( This took me a while to think up, and it may seem a little jumbled becuase of it's length, I just hope you like it as much as the others.) [This message has been edited by Jocular_Jockie (edited 08-02-99).] |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
very nice.. I like it.. very vivid.. ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Jocular_Jockie Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 11 |
Thanks Gentle, also, I wanted to point out a mistake I made. I'll try to fix it. The line that says " showing his true." Sorry about that. Thanks again. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Dragons.... a particularly personal and well loved subject of mine. Have never had the gift to write of these creatures that guide my soul, please do more. Pax vobiscum JP |
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Jocular_Jockie Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 11 |
Will do JP, thanks for reading. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Jocular......again a fine piece of work.....and this from....you must be kidding about your age, right?? ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Hi, JJ... welcome to the forums. I must say that this is a wonderful piece of work here. You have used fantasy, fantastic and sensory imagery, a creative story line and alliteration to bring the reader into a world you have imagined and brought to life. Excellent work! And I don't think the length subtracts from the value of this. On the contrary. I think it allows the reader to get involved and understand the storyline and characters better. This free verse is not just writing something down off the top of your head-- you have crafted your words and lines well. I especially liked, "A sapphire sky silhouetted with gold" and "Tar thick tree forests" and "ludicrously enormous/in contrast to his mouth/his eyes seem like gnats". I am impressed by your talent and look forward to reading more of your work. |
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Jocular_Jockie Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 11 |
Thanks very much for the comments. I appreciate them all. When I write poems, and people like them, I feel I've accomplished my goal, to give you an interesting story. It means a lot to know people like my work. Thanks for reading. P.S. No hoot, I'm just 14, do I really write like I'm older? hehe, that's good to know. |
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