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azblond
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since 1999-07-01
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The Steamy Desert

0 posted 1999-08-01 02:30 AM






For two weeks she had been away
And now a day early she came
So excited to surprise her love
She supposed she was to blame

So many nights on the road away
His voice different on the phone
But the trials were over at last
Now they’d have time alone

She bought the flowers and champagne
In the box a fancy new ring
Hoping to ease the burdens
With some of the presents she’d bring

A different life from the norm
She was the breadwinner for two
She so hated being away
But with him out of work…it had to do

Her key turned silent in the lock
And she slipped quietly in through the door
She saw the expensive lingerie
And for a minute she wasn’t quite sure

Two bodies entangled together
Sharing a passionate kiss
Never in the realms of her mind
Had she ever imagined any of this

To find her husband and his lover
She had suspected him having a fling
But the truth was more than she expected
She dropped the roses, champagne, and ring

The truth lay heavy upon her mind
As shock so very well can
There in the arms of her husband
Was not another woman, but a man

She stumbled out of the room
Ran all the way to the car
Her husband dressed in lingerie
Allowed her to get that far

As the emotions overtook her body
She emitted a long wrenching cry
A woman she could compete with
A man-she dared not even try

Her hopes were shattered completely
Disillusioned she drove far away
But the vision in her mind
That forever would stay.


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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...


© Copyright 1999 MiChelle Van Vleet - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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1 posted 1999-08-01 03:01 AM


Az, this really happened to my sister. I hope it didn't happen to you. Well told, my friend, well told.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©



elvira
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since 1999-07-06
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California
2 posted 1999-08-01 08:23 AM


a very good read...if i found myself in that situation, quite honestly, another man would not bother me, comparing myself to another woman would be much more painful...if you wrote from experience, i hope you are doing okay now?

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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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3 posted 1999-08-01 08:37 AM


My heart dropped when I read it was a man, a twist I did not expect, as well as this loving wife. I also hope this did not happen to you. You wrote it perfectly to capture the intensity of the situation.
azblond
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The Steamy Desert
4 posted 1999-08-01 09:26 AM


The first thing I want to Thank You all for is the concern...but no, this is not something that happened to me. I do know someone close to me it did happen to though, and that makes it a very true life piece for me. I shared her pain and tears, my house was the one she drove to, and I found I had no answers for her on this one. The concern you all showed is touching, and I am glad to be a part of a place where there are so many who care. DE...my heart goes out to your sis, betrayl of any kind tends to rip your heart to tiny pieces.

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...


Elizabeth
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5 posted 1999-08-01 10:01 PM


What a shock just reading this! That guy in the poem almost maid me SICK! I am so sorry for your friend, azblond, and DE's sister. That is just too bad-wish I could express it better, but this is the best I can do...*sigh*

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cheris'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 08-01-99).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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6 posted 1999-08-02 10:05 AM


Ouch....that would hurt. Well told tale.
azblond
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The Steamy Desert
7 posted 1999-08-02 11:08 AM


Thank you all for the response on this. I think it shows how much betrayl of any kind when it is not expected can throw us for a loop. Keep a look out however for HIS version of the same story...I will be working on it soon. (The "she" in this tale was not the only one I am friends with...)

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...


LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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8 posted 1999-08-02 04:58 PM


Personally, I can't believe
The story I've just read.
About a man in lingerie,
Acting feminine in her bed.

As for me, I never wear that stuff,
Either on the road or at home.
It interferes with spontaneous whoopie,
(Especially when I'm alone).

suthern
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since 1999-07-29
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9 posted 1999-08-02 07:45 PM


I'm not sure comparisons to another woman could possibly hurt more that realizing every single moment of your adult life had been a lie, every word of love had been a sham, that you'd never stood a chance... and that the self-esteem you'd gladly shattered trying to please had been sacrificed in vain.

Your poem is great, azblond... but the trip down memory lane is one I wish I could have avoided. *S*

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