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God Don't Tell Many Secrets

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Masked Intruder
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0 posted 07-31-99 03:11 PM       View Profile for Masked Intruder   Email Masked Intruder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Masked Intruder

"God don' tell many secrets,"
Mama once said to me.
"He keeps 'em to hisself, chil',
Fo' all 'ternity."

I pondered hours that night,
With a young untested mind,
On Olympic matters
To great for me to find.

When Mama lay on death's bed,
And I was at her side,
I whispered unto God,
"Please, sir, do tell me why."

But Mama turned her head,
And the last she said to me,
Was "Chil', don'chu listen,
'Bout lettin' secrets be?

"I tol' you, chil', years long 'go,
His secrets he don' tell,
He keeps 'em to hisself
Fo' worse o' fare ye well."

I cried straight out that night,
Still a child in His eyes.
I again asked my questions,
My neverending whys.

"God don' tell many secrets,"
Mama once said to me.
"He keeps 'em to hisself, chil',
Fo' all 'ternity."



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Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true?
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Sally S.
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1 posted 07-31-99 04:00 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

If you're looking for criticism, you won't find it from me. I thought this was well written and believe it will be well recieved.

I really liked the second stanza.."I pondered hours that night, With a young untested mind, On Olympic matters to great for me to find." Well done.

[This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 07-31-99).]
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 07-31-99 08:40 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Masked, as I've told you before, you are a very talented young writer.....the world needs to watch out for you if your talents are developed so finely so soon in life. This is a wonderful poem and reads incredibly well!!
Lucie
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3 posted 07-31-99 08:44 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I liked this one a lot.. back to the top.

Valor~
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4 posted 07-31-99 08:50 PM       View Profile for Valor~   Email Valor~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Valor~

Masked Intruder, your talent intrudes upon my poetic heart! I am looking forward to reading much more from you!

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Valor~ "Poetry is language as it is most distilled and most powerful."
MissNTrope
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5 posted 07-31-99 11:14 PM       View Profile for MissNTrope   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for MissNTrope

Ah - here's where that pesky Intruder went... The Menage said you were lurking about here somewhere...
Delores Hall
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6 posted 08-02-99 12:35 AM       View Profile for Delores Hall   Email Delores Hall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delores Hall

Wouldn't it be nice if God did tell all his
secrets?Then maybe we could understand things
so much better.Happy writing.
angel girl
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within a whisper...


7 posted 08-02-99 09:14 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

that was great! good job.

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The world is in your hands; it is what you make of it.

keep on chuggin'
doreen peri
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8 posted 08-02-99 11:11 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

What a great line and title, MI! "God don't tell many secrets".... I love it! Maybe I should write a poem by the same title.... hehehe... Seriously, m'friend, like I said before, this one's one of your best! Glad you brought it out of hiding.
Andrew Scott
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9 posted 08-02-99 05:41 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

A fine bit of writting here. Some of the best to be found by my accounts. Thanks for sharing this jewel. I also liked the second stanza and the title. Very creative.
Misty
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10 posted 08-02-99 05:56 PM       View Profile for Misty   Email Misty   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Misty's Home Page   View IP for Misty

I enjoyed reading this poem. it's cute how you gave it Characteristics with the accent. Great writting keep it up, & I hope to read more of your poems soon!

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11 posted 08-02-99 07:29 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I whisper those why's, I scream them and sob them... and still hear silence when I listen for answers. Great poem!
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