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Miscarriage of Justice

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0 posted 07-30-99 11:25 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

The walls of this room stare back at
In a barren shade of white.
Swollen eyes just barely let me
through this haze of pain and spite.

I lay curled in a ball on my
hugging myself to keep warm.
The only thing broken is my
fractured by this inner storm.

I hear a mournful, heart-wrenching
filled with loss and hollow pain.
I'm crying because I feel
grief is better than disdain.

I'm beaten, bruised, and torn up
by the one I love the most.
I love him still, it can't be
though he treats me like a ghost.

I know he didn't mean to hurt
then again, he never does.
He hits me with such horrendous
I ask why, he says, "Because."

I'm trapped in the web of my own
from which I cannot escape.
Doctors act as if I'm deaf and
as they talk about my rape.

"My rape.", sounds as if I own
like I bought it with sorrow.
I can feel every place that he
it will feel worse tomorrow.

Recalling disjointed
I wonder where it began.
One memory is so clear
it stays,
the day he asked for my hand.

There was no warning to this
no single clue at all.
My life suddenly filled with
as between us sprang a wall.

I have tried so hard to make it
still we grew farther apart.
All my friends told me to leave the
I love him with all my heart.

Doctors catalog my
whispering each detail.
They talk of my husband's
and of how he's now in jail.

Replayed with a dispassionate
this beating comes back to me.
Exhaling a disconnected
I give in to the memory.

This objective view brings
no surprise,
emotion clouds my mind.
I see the fight through another's
for my own are always blind.

She feared it when her husband was
in that quiet, caring way.
Worse than all the arguing
was when he wanted to play.

They argued over nothing
just about paying the bills.
Just as she started to feel
his hardened grin gave her chills.

From out of the blue, the first blow
a hard slap across the face.
She has finally run out of
loving him is her disgrace.

He knocks her down and takes her
so rough,
that she starts with racking sobs.
He thinks beating on her makes him
spittle falls from him in

Planting one last kick to her
he turns and walks out the door.
Her battered body feels like
as she crawls across the floor.

As I come out of my
myself I must disparage.
Because, even with this
I want to save my marriage.

Thinking about this makes me feel
frightened unsure and wary.
I just know it was his final
that caused me to miscarry.

©1999 DreamEvil

This is a true story, although edited for content.

Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-30-99).]
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1 posted 07-30-99 11:34 PM       View Profile for leelew   Email leelew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit leelew's Home Page   View IP for leelew

I've seen thousands like this,wanting so badly to change that which will,or can't be changed.Blaming themselves for whats not there fault.And always forgiving their attacker...becuase they love too much and hope too much.Very well done, Dream.
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2 posted 07-30-99 11:44 PM       View Profile for Rita   Email Rita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rita

very very good. puts a frown on my face....upset to hear that it happens everyday.....touching
Member Patricius
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3 posted 07-30-99 11:50 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I cried as I read this one dream...this rings so vivdly clear to me. You took a terrible subject and portrayed it so dramaticly. It brought back a lot of very harsh memories for me.

"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Gentle Soul
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4 posted 07-30-99 11:57 PM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

This hits home with me DE.. I wasnt beat.. but my sister was.. tore me up inside and out..
I love your work Dream.. always will! *hugs*


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5 posted 07-31-99 12:19 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

So painfully sad, Dream. Something all women fear, I think. Such a tragic thing, and it happens much to often..

*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

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6 posted 07-31-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for CSwtThng   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CSwtThng

Reading this gave me chiils. I only wish to become a writer like you. Your work is so vivid. It paints a picture of this broken woman in my mind. Your work is truly magnificent.
~one voice~
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7 posted 07-31-99 02:31 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Dream, your talent grows each and every day. Each time you write something new, I am in awe, especially over this one. All I can say is Wow!!!


"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."

Poet deVine
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8 posted 07-31-99 09:03 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is another example of how you are progressing in your writing. It's a good poem! (a terrible subject though!)
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9 posted 07-31-99 09:13 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

How can I say I like something when it gives me the chills... and an anger that such stories happen every day? I must echo Poet deVine... excellent poem on a terrible subject... great job!
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10 posted 07-31-99 01:36 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

While very sad, this is a true story. I'm glad that this piece has been greeted with outrage.
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11 posted 07-31-99 02:52 PM       View Profile for Emmy   Email Emmy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Emmy's Home Page   View IP for Emmy

This poem brought a tear to my eye and a pain to my heart...and amazement that such a terrible subject could be written about so well. I cry for all those who have to endure that like which the woman in your poem did; this one left me thinking Dream... thank you for sharing.
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12 posted 07-31-99 10:18 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

No problem, Emmy.I'm glad to share.
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13 posted 08-01-99 01:15 AM       View Profile for Valor~   Email Valor~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Valor~

Women like myself, especially, feel these words deep in their soul, DreamEvil. The outer bruises heal in time, but the scars left inside haunt us for a lifetime. You have brought a hope of justice here for all the women that have been victims. Thank you, and excellent work!

Valor~ "Poetry is language as it is most distilled and most powerful."
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14 posted 08-01-99 01:50 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Tragedy portrayed in such a profound manner.
A difficult subject matter...
Once again, must leave this number,
hope you don't mind it under your poem:
National Domestic Violence Hotline
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15 posted 08-01-99 02:35 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

This hits my heart stings.. there is a battered women's shelter I work with helping with cloths, and toy's for the children... the women's eyes express this exact emotion you have captured..
You have done a wonderful job... and I'm sorry this had to happen to someone you know
or love ... as I am sorry violence is the way some people answer their pain.. makes you wish every one could feel the release that writting brings to us.....
I am thinking
If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
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16 posted 08-01-99 03:07 PM       View Profile for Abdul Lateef   Email Abdul Lateef   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Abdul Lateef

For the short time I have been here I find your poetry to be extraordinarily well done.
doreen peri
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17 posted 08-01-99 09:19 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

This is a very difficult subject to write about, DE, and I agree that your work is improving. I can see that you've put some time into this and worked on it. I especially like the title! (Sometimes I had a little problem with the voice changing.... from the wife's "I", to the 3rd person "she", then back to the wife's first person "I" again.... perhaps you did that on purpose? To me it was a little confusing). I think it's an excellent exercise to place yourself in the woman's situation and speak from that voice to write about such a horrible subject. You captured the feelings well, despite the structure of going back and forth between 1st and 3rd person. Keep up the good work, DE.
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18 posted 08-01-99 09:26 PM       View Profile for Haskins   Email Haskins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Haskins's Home Page   View IP for Haskins

Terrifically disturbing and brutally honest.
I hope that writing the poem was cathartic for you, and that, rather than being a grotesque monument to your pain, it is a ticket through the darkness.

William Haskins AKA The Mad Monk
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19 posted 08-01-99 09:35 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

What to say! This was deeply touching, being one myself that has been in a situation like that. It brings to the surface anger. No woman deserves that/man either.
You have done a wonderful job with such a painful subject. Keep up the good work, and God smile upon you!
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20 posted 08-01-99 11:43 PM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

what woman wouldn't feel the pain in this one...some of us more deeply from having lived it, others from the fear and loathing that such things can and do happen. A great perspective of a womans feelings Dream...Once more I applaud you.

For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...

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21 posted 08-02-99 02:01 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I'm glad this one has done well. Hopefully the message will be heard as well as read.
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22 posted 08-02-99 02:41 PM       View Profile for grandiloquent   Email grandiloquent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit grandiloquent's Home Page   View IP for grandiloquent

tears... I'm speechless, Dream. A beautiful script to a horrifying reality.
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23 posted 08-02-99 06:17 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Well done Dream. May your voice be heard beyond these poetic walls, loud and clear for all to heed. Thanks for sharing and for tackling such a horid subject in a caring yet disturbing manner. You are a true talent.
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24 posted 08-02-99 07:21 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Good work here DE. Though we have not seen eye to eye-you could change that you know. I like that you are growing as a poetic talent.

Challenge yourself an move into a subject of ight. give it a shot and surprise yourself with what you really have inside.

Nosce te ipsom
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