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Mike
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0 posted 1999-07-30 06:08 PM


On noiseless feet, across the room he crept,
As shadows danced on walls from taper's flame,
He gazed upon her beauty as she slept
As tenderly he whispered out her name.

O' Nightingale, you touched within my heart
And carried me to meadows in my mind,
Do not you feel, the passions you impart
Whilst in your arms, my soul you have entwined?

Amongst the columbine in mountain lea,
I feel within the song of nightingale,
For I have danced love's sensual ballet,
And on your wings, to ectasy did sail.

O' Nightingale, time's come to let you fly,
As I depart, and you wing to the sky.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 07-30-99).]

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1 posted 1999-07-30 07:11 PM


Excellent rhyme scheme and execution, Mike. Did you not rhyme the last two lines by design? I would be interested in your thoughts.
Mike
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2 posted 1999-07-30 07:20 PM


that is what you call a brain freeze.... sorry about that.....
thanks for the kind comment....

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3 posted 1999-08-13 02:36 AM


Beautiful! Lyrical!



A Romantic Heart
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4 posted 2000-03-22 03:05 AM


Beautiful...tweet, tweet, deserves a repost!
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very sweeping
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