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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
I sit slick with sweat a gallon jug of tea ripening to honey in the corner of the porch Too hot for anything but sticky red wings from the nearest bar and a swiped 32 oz. of cheap beer Sun-starved, giddy, pressing peace in like a bruise, I feel the wink of nostalgia; the sudden bright hint of future passing early, if only to cover today with hope... These are the summers I asked for when I wondered what came after the bliss of long months at the pool, sunsets almost holy over the ballpark: the rosy, golden calm -- drones of crickets and heybatterbatter with white moths circling the fluorescents, nights still as death with my crown resting in the nest of my laced fingers - ancient stars reflected in the dark of my eyes. What waited when something beyond the child inside called out to play? Will I marry? Will I take my husband and our 3 postcard children to weeks at the beach in North Carolina? Fighting over shovels in the sand with the kids; making love in the strange secret of 5 am; Laughing, Screaming, Loving. Will I divorce and open the harsh desserts of Egypt with the tear of my hungry hands? Run naked over the white soft shores of Greece? or still sit still watching tea turn over Grain alcohol in one hand, mind cascading in the other Praying to keep the expectant beauty and optimism of a teenager (its connected promising boredom) or at least the tan on my legs. [This message has been edited by grandiloquent (edited 07-31-99).] |
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Cobra Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 58 |
Woah... Deep... Interesting... Cool... ------------------ Cammie |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Well written! Great imagery! I agree with Cobra... very deep, like still waters. I like the "wink of nostalgia." I've yet to try my hand at free verse, but this would be a level of quality I would seek. Thanks for sharing. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A wonderful painting of a poem. You described my hometown and rambling youthful thoughts excellently. heybatterbatter SHOULD be a word in the dictionary, as important as it was to me at that age. Thank you for visions recalled. (desserts, I assume, is a typo?) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful imagery with this one!! |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
No, no typos. Desserts: like cake, ice cream ... something sweet (note the "hungry" hands). You'll see more and more "typos" the more you read of mine. E.g. hole and whole, know and no, etc. This was a little more strange and subtle -- thank you for catching it. [This message has been edited by grandiloquent (edited 07-31-99).] |
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MissNTrope Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 43 |
Any friend of my dear pal Ms. Malaprop is certainly a pal o'wine......  |
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