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SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs
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0 posted 07-29-99 05:51 PM       View Profile for SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs   Email SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs

As the future rolls forth
I ponder my reason for being
Destiny drives my wings
Where I will land rests unknown
Play that sweet song again
I have forgotten the taste
The flavour is slowly changing
Rememberabce is like a dream
Slowly deminishing in the light
Each step I take is detected
I cannot as of yet comprehend
Slowly breezes switch direction
Like a water lily I dance
Sing to me in a foreign tongue
Your voice is so beautiful
Melting like wax on my spine
As the flames surround me
I dare to forget
But the images are caught in stone.


I am a 17 year old who is merely interested in the the art of poetry and would love to be critiqued on my style. My poem is about love and how it is difficult to forget the passions and emotions surrounding love. ANd by the way, does anyone think I hae the potential to become a poet? THanx for taking the time to read my poem.
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spaRkle, your style is good. May I direct you to the Critique Forum? There we can analyze your poem in detail and, perhaps, give constructive suggestions that may help. Can you become a poet? That's like a baby asking if he can become a human. You ARE a poet...by birth...as we all are. How well you are able to express your poetic abilities will remain to be seen. I'd say, if this poem is any indication of things to come, you are off to a flying start!
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