The changes of Life through a teens eyes.

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The changes of Life through a teens eyes.

SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 4

0 posted 1999-07-29 05:40 PM

Unstable hours of play,
Remain untouched for eternity.
The air is stale.
But oh so free I feel!
Clattering in the distance
I no longer belong,
Yet my place remains open.
Moving through the grass,
The night is so peaceful.
Each picture I paint
Feels stronger then the next.
Carrying memories to be blocked,
I travel, yet remain plesantly amused.

I wrote this poem after comming to the realization that I have become very different from my friends. I changed high schools for a year and upon returning to their presence, they still accept me, though I am no longer the superficial person I was. I still love them dearly and hold no regrets, it's funny how people change.

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

1 posted 1999-07-29 09:35 PM

Something I can really relate to...excellent job!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

TheGreenPolarBear
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since 1999-05-23

Posts 38
Kansas

2 posted 1999-07-29 11:23 PM

Yep, I like this one too. The imagery is really good. But maybe try something like "But oh how free I feel!" or "But oh I feel so free!" I think either of those would fit better, unless you had a specific reason for your word choice. I like the last line, "pleasently amused" is well placed. Definitely, good poem.

The Green Polar Bear

Princess Lily
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since 1999-07-13

Posts 149
USA

3 posted 1999-07-30 12:13 PM

I liked it.Keep up the good work!~Lily

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*

Delores Hall
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since 1999-07-16

Posts 342
USA

4 posted 1999-07-30 12:25 PM

As we get older we all change.What we think
is good today may not be what is good for
tomorrow. It's about growing as a person.

SpaRrkLe_GoDdeSs
New Member

since 1999-07-29

Posts 4

5 posted 1999-07-30 03:52 PM

thanx for the input.. i am really happy to know someone like me poem

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