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My Wife's Poem "Bipedal Fable"

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Abdul Lateef
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since 07-29-99
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Centrevill, Va. ,USA


0 posted 07-29-99 03:49 PM       View Profile for Abdul Lateef   Email Abdul Lateef   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Abdul Lateef

Bipedal Fable

Seeing your motherly shadow in the night spilling your malleable words
Like spun silver in the moonlight
Explaining that it will be “alright we are alright”
Running your fingers through our minds calming our sprits
Like jewel crescent crowns
Feeling the ants in my tummy turn to butterflies
And my panic breath becomes an easy feeling
Bunched up on dirty sheets unimaginable
To taint a small sprit
But in you is the comfort of an angel and all your gracefulness.
I swear I felt feathers.
Did you see that?
I swear I heard a euphonic sound disguised in a whisper.
Did you hear that?
Over our cheeks brushing our lips
Strands of dreams circle our foreheads
Pointing out crystal sparkles.
Every description taking us away to refuge
In you we were uncontrolled
In you we were children allowed to laugh out loud
Talking us down from the piled dumpsters,
Messy beds
Dirty feet and golden treats,
No reputation on cleaning,
No double or crazy meanings,
Just babies being babies.
Ignoring the hate and desperation.
The silence of your breathing resounded
And blocked the echo of pounding
And yelling at the faults that
Remain infant’s perfection
Is the infection that we refused to catch.
We were the batch of burned cookies that no one wanted but
We were content at the disposition
And the idea of living together forever in the thought
Of the story told to guide us to salvation
In our selves.
We were little and for that moment
We stood as giants.
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LngJhnAg
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Abdul

I almost always have a real hard time with free form poetry (or whatever its called). I like meter and rhyme a lot more. It provides me the structure my old distractable mind needs.

However....

Your poem really hit some chords in me - I thought it was powerful, and hard. Like a diamond is hard. Tell your wife for me? I think she's great!
 
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