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elvira
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Very good form!

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Elvira: I have to say I really enjoyed the negativity of "will not accept" phrase being used in each stanza. It created a shelter for the positive words. Very interesting and creative use of expression. As always it is a pleasure to read your work.
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elvira

An interesting style. I read it a couple of times to get the flow and direction.

Now, about that "20 years" comment. Does this mean you are an old woman???? Cranky and mean? Scary to all the little league ball players next door? I can see you now when the little boy comes to your door to retrieve his errant ball...

I will not accept your
Apologies
Crying
Tears

This
Ball is mine
Ya little urchin!
He he he
Cackle
elvira
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rofl@pizza delivery guy
Genea
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enjoyed it elvira..thanks for posting it.
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Very unique form... I liked it! Your poetry just gets better and better. This one was well enjoyed. Looking forward to perhaps more free verse; you have a very individual style it seems. A job well done.
Andrew Scott
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Ouch! I felt like every line was being punctuated with a stiff finger to the chest. Good effect. A job well done Lady E.
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