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Heartbreaker/Heartbroken
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Heartbreaker/Heartbroken |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I lay next to her just watching her cry. Heartbroken tears are trailing down her face. I told her, "I love you", was just a lie. The streaming tears really picked up their pace. She's not the first nor will she be the last. Emotional rape is my favorite game. I recall the broken hearts of the past. All of them cry out their heart, just the same. With tears still flowing, I stand up to leave. "Don't leave me", she cries, "Could I have done more?" Their begging is the goal that I achieve. That crumpled face is something I adore. In the back of my mind there is one doubt. What happens if my game should turn about? I met a lovely woman just this night. Just her perfume makes this jaded head spin. This giddy joy wraps me in new delight. I think for this one I might give up sin. I take her home to my place for a change. That is something I don't normally do. She does things for me I did not arrange. Just dumping this woman would hurt me too. When we were done she got ready to leave. She said, "You're a lousy lover, it's true." "If you thought I'd stay, you're just so naïve." "Don't leave me", I cried, "I love you!" I never gave, I was just a taker. Now I'm just a lonely ex-heartbreaker. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
sounds like the speaker in ur poem got what he deserved....the louse! Nice to see justice done at the end. |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
Well written.What goes around always comes around.A lesson we all should learn!I loved it! |
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deannamarie Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43WI |
You will reap what you sow. Good work!  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dreamer Nice poem... yer a devil, yanno that? Oh.. yeah... I guess you do *g* |
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Angel_of_Music Junior Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 35Sanger, TX USA |
Excellent! A bit of revenge for all of us victims. Very well done. ------------------ "In sleep he sang to me...in dreams he came...that voice which calls to me, and speaks my name..." |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Karma! A deserving end. Well done DE. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Tables must be on wheels, as quickly as they can turn. Good work, Dream. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
He got what he deserved, Dream. Wonderful!!! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Just a bit of post-midnight inspiration. Thank you all. |
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Abdul Lateef New Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 9Centrevill, Va. ,USA |
Powerful story with perfect conclusion.... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
There's truth in all good poetry. I see it in this one. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
DE.. this is a well written poem.. I love.. you are awesome as usual! ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
I absolutely love it.Doesn't sweet revenge always turn out crappy for the revengy, but wonderful for all the brokenhearted victims that they left alone ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe *A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive* |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Post-midnight inspiration, huh DE? Well then...let's hear it for late night vigils!! As always your talent is an inspiration. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you much, all of you. 'Tis indeed a pleasure to know that my tale is pleasing to some. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well written. What goes around comes around-and sometimes, when it comes around, it *really* gets ya! |
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Phantom Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 18 |
Very well done! Do on to others..... ------------------ Open your heart to the Darkness,set your soul free. |
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dianecalka New Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 2Stamford, CT |
Keep on writing you are good with words but not with woman. I hope you have changed your destructive ways and learned your lesson about life and love. Sorry if this is a little harsh. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Without the turning of the tables..I would've been angry!! But, I'm not..  This was written very well and seems well thought out. Fine work, DE. You just get better and better. |
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