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Fofinha
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0 posted 1999-07-28 11:56 AM


One moment I'm alone
the next moment
I see your face
and hear your voice
in that certain tone.

Your gentle touch
the look in your eyes
the way I feel
oh please,
tell me why.

I let you go
never to see you again.
And I made a mistake
giving myself to you
everyone will know.

All I can do is cry,
thinking constantly
of that single night
you changed my world
so suddenly.

Now I'm paying the price
a child yet to be born.
A constant reminder
of shattered dreams,
a heart that is torn.

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It is a rare and special thing
to find a friend
who will remain a friend forever...

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1 posted 1999-07-31 02:42 PM


Can't decide whether to write, "this is sad...but good luck" or "I like how this is set up, and the subtle rhyming scheme is good" Can't decide if I'd like to appear insensitive, but poetically critical, or stitch my head into a sappy comment.

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Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true?

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