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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 07-27-99 05:26 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Confession

Frozen ice cube
chilled expressions
appear upon hearing
a sadly startling confession
Being from a dense
forest of trees town
he arose to approach us
with a deep seated frown
Broken English spoken
from his foreign tongue
yet the invaded victim
he had become
Clear pain filled tears
dripped down
his years
of stubble grown face
as he spoke
extremely sad details
of how he came to sit
before us in this place

She suffered painfully
for ten sad years
She could never awaken
to greet the morning
without creating
overwhelming fears
I tried in vain
to make her smile
each, and every
pain bearing day
her mind
was just thousands
of galaxy miles away
Her dreams
were nightmares
in disguise
All her demanding desires
the past five years
revolved around
being united
with the heavenly skies

Now I plead my case
to all of you
before you make
your judgment true
look into my eyes
and know...
Wherever my everlasting days
are spent
I will always cherish
her facial glow
the minute she realized
I let her go
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hoot_owl_rn
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I had a bit of trouble with this one connecting the first stanza with the following two. But I must tell you, these four lines
"I will always cherish
her facial glow
the minute she realized
I let her go"
....they are priceless!!!!



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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Lost Dreamer
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hoot_owl_rn: This is about a man who quietly took his wife's life, but it was found out so now he sits before his jury to decide his fate. Thank-you for your response, I hope my explanation helped you.
Balladeer
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I understood it perfectly, dreamer, and it was excellently told.
Delores Hall
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It is sad to think that the only way to get
relief in times of sickness is to leave this
world.Well written.They say confession is
good for the soul.
INclan
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An interesting composition...is it a plea or a cop-out? Since we do not know his fate...the issue remains in question.
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Balladeer: Thank- you very much.

Delores: It is sad how many people do not want to go on, but the puzzling question is, do they or someone else have the right to take their life? Thank-You for your response.

INclan: Good question, I kind of felt as writing this that he already had done his time, standing by, and trying to make his wife's life comfortable for 10 years. Then I also don't beleive in taking anothers life, so I guess it's left up to the imagination of the reader to decide. Thank-you for your response.
hoot_owl_rn
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I re-read this again after your explanation and wondered how I could have ever missed it the first time. Thanks for leading this blind soul down the path....smiles. Good work!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
 
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