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Where is he - my mental excitement?

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poetFemmeFatale
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Star above shine down upon me
Let me wish upon thee -
All your magic - all your mystery
Let me wish upon thee...

Where is he who'll fill that space
Deep within my secret place ?
Pain is etched beneath my face
and deep within my secret place...

If only I could hold you tight
our love would feel so right --
To possess your soul for just one night -
My mind - you do excite......


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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

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Severn
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1 posted 07-27-99 01:12 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This is nice...and wistful. Have you ever read Emily Dickinson? Your use of dashes puts me in mind of her work. Here's an excerpt of a lovely one:
'Wild nights - Wild nights
Were I with thee
wild nights should be
Our luxury!

Futile the winds-
to a heart in port
Gone with the compass!
Gone with the chart!"

It's a shame but I can't remember the last verse! What a great poet you are.
blueloon
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2 posted 07-27-99 01:15 AM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

Your words created a musical pattern in my head as I read aloud. Very thoughtful way of provoking thought.
blueloon

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To give yourself keeps yourself still,
And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill.
-shakespeare
angel girl
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within a whisper...


3 posted 07-27-99 09:50 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

Severn,
I love Emily Dickinson. She is my favorite poet. I have probably read at least half of her poems, and even memorized some. However, the one you mentioned seems to have escaped me. I don't think I've ever heard it. Thanks for sharing that excerpt from it.

FemmeFatale, Severn is right- your work does resemble that of Emily Dickinson's. That is truly a great compliment. That is what I long for- to write like Emily.
Great job!
poetFemmeFatale
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4 posted 08-30-99 09:29 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Blah blah blah.....I read this poem again, and find myself still blabbering away like a fool for a man ! Please tell me I'm not the only silly female who has wasted many a day doing that !!!?? Good thing I have "hobbies & interests" now !! LOL

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale


Pepper
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PFF You are certainly not! Unfortunately there are many of us out here "who has wasted many a day..." Enjoyed the read

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 08-30-99 11:16 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

pFF,
The last line last stanza maybe
My body to delight? hehehe
Nice poem your one of my favorites
traveler
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7 posted 08-30-99 11:42 AM       View Profile for traveler   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for traveler

Another lovely poem Femme ... most are strong enough to stand alone ...yet, male or female we yearn for someone to complete that other half ... to share the things we live in this life ... thanks for all of your prose ... such lovely gifts to share ...
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8 posted 08-30-99 11:51 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

PFF: If you are a silly female for wasting time wishing, you're certainly not alone!!! Well done!
U K Hero
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9 posted 08-30-99 08:10 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

Now this I liked. Do not criticise yourself too much, It was well thought out.
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May your thoughts be ever impregnated.....and nothing else.
Alwye
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11 posted 08-30-99 08:58 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Wonderful work, PFF..haven't most of us spent time yearning for someone? Exellently done.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


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