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Blue
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since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida

0 posted 1999-07-26 05:10 PM



you haven't called
I haven't cried
I've kept my head
held up so high

I've been so strong
as days have passed
but yesterday
it was my last

today I found
a letter sent
from you to me
goodbye's intent

written and read
three months ago
I still had hope
would not let go

staring at words
now all I hear
is lies lies lies
away fades fear

replaced by pain
lies lies all lies
fire in my heart
tears in my eyes

so even I
have fine'ly cried
as truth came clear
and my hope died

close eyes, lick lips
tasting the salt
tears of knowledge
it was my fault

© Copyright 1999 Blue - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
1 posted 1999-07-26 05:49 PM


Nice poem! I think we've all been there once or twice.
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
2 posted 1999-07-26 05:53 PM


Nice job, I like the way you expressed yourself.
Blue
Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida
3 posted 1999-07-27 01:08 AM


Thanks. It's nice to know people can relate. I appreciate the feedback.
ChickenLittle
New Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 2

4 posted 1999-07-28 02:40 AM


You are a very talented writer, and whoever you wrote this about must have been horrible to you. I love your poem and you should post more.

Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
5 posted 1999-07-28 02:48 AM


Very sad....oh, how I've been there...a wonderful job, Blue. I look forward to more of your postings!

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*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks


Blue
Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida
6 posted 1999-07-28 11:30 PM


Thanks.
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-07-29 09:44 AM


Nice

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

deannamarie
Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43
WI
8 posted 1999-07-29 10:27 AM


Nice? I like the ones I csn relate to and understand and this is one of them. Good job.
Blue
Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida
9 posted 1999-07-29 01:03 PM


Thanks again everybody. Maybe I'll even get up the guts to post some more thanks to your responses.
Blue
Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida
10 posted 1999-07-29 01:03 PM


Thanks again everybody. Maybe I'll even get up the guts to post some more thanks to your responses.
Blue
Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida
11 posted 1999-07-29 01:03 PM


Thanks again everybody. Maybe I'll even get up the guts to post some more thanks to your responses.
Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
12 posted 2005-10-29 01:29 AM


Nice!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink


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