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Mark R.
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since 06-25-99
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0 posted 07-26-99 10:26 AM       View Profile for Mark R.   Email Mark R.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mark R.


As a child....
There was a place I liked to hide.
As a man....
Someone in whom I could confide.

As a child....
A place to run through unbound and free.
As a man....
A person whom I would've loved to see.

As a child....
Looking left and right at the marigolds around.
As a man....
Memories of being held and comforted without a sound.

As a child....
It had always been a place of delight.
As a man....
Recurring dreams of life in the moonlight.

As a child....
Puzzled as mother cried and stayed.
As a man....
Understanding it was where father laid.

There within the marigolds.....
© Copyright 1999 Mark R. - All Rights Reserved
elvira
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1 posted 07-26-99 10:32 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

touching...eloquent...great form...Welcome Mark

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...Music to my Ears...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...Perfection...devotion...Master...apart...plain...chat?
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 07-26-99 12:49 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I loved the form also, and wow, what an ending - not at all what I expected...Bravo...very nice...I like your style of writing, keep it up!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Mark R.
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3 posted 07-27-99 08:49 AM       View Profile for Mark R.   Email Mark R.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark R.

Thank you everyone. It makes me very proud that even a topic such as this one can still get positive feedback. I really appreciate everyones encouragement.
Poet deVine
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4 posted 07-27-99 09:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Lovely! There's a soothing, hopeful quality to this. Great job!
Ron
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Mark, would please correct the email address in your profile - it doesn't work and everytime someone replies to your post the notice ends up in my mailbox. Thanks!
Mark R.
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6 posted 07-29-99 07:24 AM       View Profile for Mark R.   Email Mark R.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark R.


Sorry about that Ron. I'll correct it right away.
hoot_owl_rn
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Mark, this is a very touching and sincere poem. I really enjoyed reading it. It's one of those that you read and sit dumbfounded by it's simple brillance.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Mark R.
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Thank you, hoot. It's one of those poems that's near and dear in my heart. I'm glad you all like it.
LngJhnAg
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9 posted 07-29-99 02:52 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

What they said, Mark

I loved the way you brought closure to this poem. A clean close is so hard to get in a lot of situations. If a person reads a poem and then goes, "Man!" - that's clean closure.

Man!
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