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DreamEvil
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0 posted 07-24-99 09:17 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

His love for her could never be enough.
She would never come to be at his side.
He thought he might be made of stronger stuff.
Why did she have to be another's bride?

They met by chance over the Internet.
Love of poetry brought them much closer.
The thought of her was too much to forget.
She wrecked through his heart like a Bulldozer.

To end this dull ache, he thought of the knife.
He thought of a bullet shot through his brain.
Would he have the courage to take his life?
How could he stand to go through that again?

He felt echoes of his apathy stir.
It felt like the best way to forget her.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©




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~one voice~
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1 posted 07-24-99 09:25 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Women, huh? hehehehe Can't live with'em, can't live without'em...

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Dragon
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2 posted 07-24-99 11:23 AM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Well done,brother of my heart....I loved it
quote99
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3 posted 07-24-99 11:44 AM       View Profile for quote99   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quote99

Again, well written. But are you advocating suecide because of a lost love on the internet? Sounds immature to me.
DreamEvil
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4 posted 07-24-99 03:04 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I do not advocate anything.
thursdayschild
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5 posted 07-24-99 03:16 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

quote99, I believe your comment on maturity
is totally out of place here. The poet is
expressing some deep pain, and your lack
of understanding the emotion is apparent.
Please refrain from attacking the character
of a poet, it is not constructive at all.
Leave your remarks regarding the poem,
that's what this is about...
I apologize for the diatribe under your poem
Dear Sir....great work.
Alwye
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6 posted 07-24-99 09:58 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

This one as well as Dark Sonnet2 are painfully sad, yet written once again with obvious talent. Keep up the great work, my friend.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter
DreamEvil
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7 posted 07-25-99 01:20 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thanks you two.
Blackdrake
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since 07-23-99
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Depends on the day :)


8 posted 07-25-99 02:17 AM       View Profile for Blackdrake   Email Blackdrake   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blackdrake

Most excellent.

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Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light
DreamEvil
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9 posted 07-25-99 12:48 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I thought so too, my new friend.
Ominous
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10 posted 07-26-99 03:52 AM       View Profile for Ominous   Email Ominous   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ominous

Dream you never cease to amaze me. You have such a talent for poetry.
You have a nac for describing heartache, I sense you have been there.

Another fabulous piece my dear friend.

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I am but a shadow, lost within this world of darkness
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