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DreamEvil
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0 posted 07-23-99 09:18 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

We danced that night, under a killing moon.
Inconstant love was our only lament.
In our hearts we knew that dawn comes too soon.
Desperation was all too apparent.

Did I truly tire of this world's demands?
Eyes shining, she asks if I can do it.
She put the cold steel into my hands.
If you love me, she said, you would prove it.

I put the gun to the side of her head.
Smiling for me, she looked up with a sigh.
I pulled the trigger and knew she was dead.
I watched the light of life dim in her eye.

Now I run from myself desperately.
I had not the strength to turn it on me.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©


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~one voice~
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1 posted 07-23-99 09:47 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

For a first try, this is absolutely beautiful love! Keep it up!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Alwye
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In the space between moments


2 posted 07-23-99 09:58 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

dark and disturbing....but a great job, Dream!

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter
Lost Dreamer
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3 posted 07-23-99 10:30 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Startling, but very good. You have a wonderful talent.
IsabelleSkye
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4 posted 07-23-99 11:22 PM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

Oh my! Well I must be honest...this was too scary for me
But WOW it packs a powerful punch!
*shivering*
Izzy

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"I would rather sit on a pumpkin, and have it all to myself,
than to be crowded on a velvet cushion."
.....Henry David Thoreau
Gentle Soul
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5 posted 07-24-99 12:41 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

wow... sad.. it is good tho..

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Gėnt£ė¤§°ū£

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


6 posted 07-24-99 12:44 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

woah sh**ola good damn stuff
elvira
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7 posted 07-24-99 02:24 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

assisted suicide...very controversial topic

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If I had my mouth I would bite.
If I had my liberty I would do my liking.
In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~

Blackdrake
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Depends on the day :)


8 posted 07-24-99 03:48 AM       View Profile for Blackdrake   Email Blackdrake   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blackdrake

Very dark and forbooding.
I like it.

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Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light
Dragon
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9 posted 07-24-99 11:49 AM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Dark and beautiful.I loved it!
DreamEvil
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10 posted 07-24-99 03:06 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I'm glad someone appreciates reality as opposed to fantasy.
 
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