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The Oaks

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Tim
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Beneath the canopy of beauteous oak
Seeds had fallen to earth and then awoke,
Four lives anew commenced on their journey
Within the ambit of protective tree.
Shielded by the majestic oak, saplings grew
Straight and tall, reaching out to heaven's blue,
Shielded from the blazing sun, summer's storm
And in the cold of winter were kept warm
By nurture of unseen force from above,
A force as strong and dear as mother's love.

Four trees are grown, have reached the heaven's blue,
With mother's love, how proud and tall they grew.



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Hey Tim - I actually got here early this time...
You have crafted a very lovely extended metaphor here - I like it lots... Every mighty oak was indeed once a tiny acorn....Nice work, my friend
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2 posted 07-23-99 06:22 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent job, Tim! (you didn't happen to name one of them Forrest, by any chance, did you?......no, I suppose not)
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enjoyed the read...oh to be a babe in the woods...perhaps those saps were brothers, living on a ridge?...sorry just in a bit of a silly mood today

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If I had my mouth I would bite.
If I had my liberty I would do my liking.
In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~



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Tim
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A young oak who along with her twin brother just graduated from high school saw a copy of the poem and said nice extended metaphor.
I politely replied, I knew that...(having read Nan's comment) I then politely asked, what is an extended metaphor? I actually wanted to name the twins Denise and DeNephew but got overruled. Balladeer... sorry, no Forest. Two sap brothers... and if they live on a ridge, it would be the ridge between the Hatfields and McCoys. Thank you all for the nice comments.
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One of my favorite poets has written a poem about one of my favorite trees! I'd like to sit under one now if you don't mind...hand me that book of poetry...that bunch of grapes.. that bit of cheese.........hmmmmmmmmm......heaven.
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Tim~
Tee-Hee ... your replies were as amusing then as they are today~
WONDERFUL ~
~*Marge*~

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