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elvira
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0 posted 1999-07-22 05:45 PM




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INclan
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1 posted 1999-07-22 05:52 PM


Elvira,

Thank you, I liked the form and I like the content. Pleae, keep it up.

Balladeer
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2 posted 1999-07-22 05:54 PM


This is well-done, Elvira, and very shapely.
elvira
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3 posted 1999-07-22 06:02 PM




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Andrew Scott
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4 posted 1999-07-22 06:17 PM


In reference to the last line... once again, and I quote from a source I know not... "Love enters through a woman'e ears." As for the shape? I could see that, but I refuse to make comment on the numbers Good piece of work here.

P.S. Thanks for taking the time to visit my own work. Very much appreciated.

elvira
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5 posted 1999-07-22 08:00 PM




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Andrew Scott
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6 posted 1999-07-22 08:11 PM


Ah, yes. "I see, I see." said the blind man. I keep telling myself I've got to get my eyes checked.
elvira
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7 posted 1999-07-22 08:42 PM




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Lost Dreamer
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8 posted 1999-07-22 09:44 PM


Very nice, it must be a challenge to get the shapes for your poetry. It definetly gives style and class to the poems.
elvira
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9 posted 1999-07-23 02:58 AM




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CastleHoward
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10 posted 1999-08-11 09:16 PM


Perfection must be... (taking your other poems into account) a forbidding and demanding Master dressed in black whose every oh-so-English word must be obeyed, he with the countenance of Alan Rickman, perhaps? and a frequent flyer? *smiles*
Christopher
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11 posted 1999-08-11 09:26 PM


You named your poem Perfection,
Dare never dream of rejection.
With prose so sweet, so fine,
I know they'll last for all of time!

(by the by, I may be the sick one, but 'tis not the fair form of a woman I see in the shape of your words Elvira!!!)

------------------
Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before,
I need a woman, to help me feel.
-Live-

elvira
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12 posted 1999-08-11 11:31 PM




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