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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I am calm, at peace with the blade Will my funeral have pretty flowers? For there’ll be no more this masquerade The dogs have been out for hours The woods were a nice place for dying Suited her well she made no complaint I told her no pain would suffer lying She struggled little from her restraint The silver glint of moonbeams in her eyes Reflected the arching blades last descent And in each time the blade would rise We two lovers our passions spent My wrists unsheathed from flowing sleeves Blood dripping from my sweating brow Would no one knew me well believe? There was a killer in me now The blade is quiet courage lost I scream so the dogs would not miss Tonight the toll I won’t pay the cost Of a woman who wanted this -you never bring me flowers anymore Neil Diamond with Barbra Streisand Neil I always knew was a murderer a murderer [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-22-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
A Darkling at heart, walt?  ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
I love it.. its got a lot of feeling in it in my opinion ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
oh my, walt...didn't know you had those "dark" secrets  ------------------ If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~ |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
captivating, great use of symbolism. Thanks, enjoyed this one. |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
Walt my friend,Darkly seductive!I love it! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Bravo my friend, excellent piece ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Walt! This rocks! That's all I can say! Every day I see you get better and better! However, I am wondering what's up with this Neil Diamond being a murderer thing! lol...------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I can certainly see a progression in your talent with this one.......nicely done even though the subject is very dark! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Darkly beautiful...I love it. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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