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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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(Hello! I've just been to a lecture on Shakespeare's Sonnets - what a great way to spend a morning. Here's an offering of my own, though nothing like the master of course!) By that foaming ocean I walked and your voice wet my face in the cold salt spray Solitary sneaker prints and your sunny sky eyes in the sharp sand I smelled the wind rushing your scent through my crazy hair You drown me Striding on the shore by wild ocean strength I choke with liquid love in my seaside cell Wish I could taste the sea forget you for salt and seaweed You're everywhere |
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Starfish Junior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 34New Zealand |
Good poem. The man you describe appears to pick up the attributes of the environment, becomes the sea, a power metaphor for love. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow is all can say....where do I begin? What a wonderful feeling I get when I read this...it's like I'm tasting salt, man!! Good work! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, incredible!!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I'm back here in the depths of this vault, dusting off some really old stuff..(he he) and thought this one definately deserved to go back for another round. I just love how vivid the imagery is in this! I'm a salt-aholic, so maybe that explains it?? ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thankyou, my friend! It's always nice to have long-ago posted work dusted off the shelf! it's time to read some of your work now, me thinks! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah - another good one surfaces - I missed so many good poems during those couple of weeks - This is a lovely poem - (not a sonnet, and not Shakespearean of course) but a truly good poem....Very nice, indeed... |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
This is so lovely It haunts. A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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