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Seaside Cell

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Severn
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0 posted 07-21-99 07:05 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

(Hello! I've just been to a lecture on Shakespeare's Sonnets - what a great way to spend a morning. Here's an offering of my own, though nothing like the master of course!)


By that foaming ocean
I walked and your voice
wet my face
in the cold salt spray

Solitary sneaker prints
and your sunny sky eyes
in the sharp sand

I smelled the wind
rushing your scent
through my crazy hair

You drown me

Striding on the shore
by wild ocean strength
I choke with liquid love
in my seaside cell

Wish I could taste the sea
forget you for salt
and seaweed

You're everywhere
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Starfish
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since 07-20-99
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New Zealand


1 posted 07-22-99 01:12 AM       View Profile for Starfish   Email Starfish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starfish

Good poem. The man you describe appears to pick up the attributes of the environment, becomes the sea, a power metaphor for love.
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
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2 posted 07-25-99 10:00 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wow is all can say....where do I begin? What a wonderful feeling I get when I read this...it's like I'm tasting salt, man!! Good work!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Alwye
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since 06-16-99
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In the space between moments


3 posted 07-26-99 12:16 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Wow, incredible!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter
poetFemmeFatale
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Arkansas


4 posted 08-15-99 12:14 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I'm back here in the depths of this vault, dusting off some really old stuff..(he he) and thought this one definately deserved to go back for another round. I just love how vivid the imagery is in this! I'm a salt-aholic, so maybe that explains it??

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Severn
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5 posted 08-15-99 04:41 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thankyou, my friend! It's always nice to have long-ago posted work dusted off the shelf! it's time to read some of your work now, me thinks!
Nan
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6 posted 08-15-99 11:01 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Ah - another good one surfaces - I missed so many good poems during those couple of weeks - This is a lovely poem - (not a sonnet, and not Shakespearean of course) but a truly good poem....Very nice, indeed...
aziza
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since 07-09-2006
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!


7 posted 06-10-2007 08:40 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

This is so lovely
It haunts.

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Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


8 posted 11-12-2007 09:11 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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