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Open Poetry #1

Lifeless form

Starfish
Junior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 34
New Zealand

0 posted 1999-07-21 08:20 AM

I tried to wite a poem
that might, break out
of its shell a while

Dazzle you with verbal
handstands and
slight of hand tricks

But today it resembles
its oringinator -
unable to touch you

in its lifeless form

mia
Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 118

1 posted 1999-07-21 10:01 AM

Starfish...
very nice... I'm not sure what it means for you but it ressembles a whole lot how feel about my boyfriend... My poems just don't touch him like I would want them to...I mean, he's a really deep person...an artist eaven, just not a man of many words. My life revolves around words (probably too much) and it makes me real sad that i am unable to touch him. Would you mind if I sent it to him? Maybe then he would get it...

mia

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-07-21 10:11 AM

Wow.....I really liked this one. Just enough said to make the reader think and not too little said to keep them wondering of your intentions. Good work!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

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