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Starfish
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since 07-20-99
Posts 35
New Zealand


0 posted 07-21-99 08:20 AM       View Profile for Starfish   Email Starfish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starfish

I tried to wite a poem
that might, break out
of its shell a while

Dazzle you with verbal
handstands and
slight of hand tricks

But today it resembles
its oringinator -
unable to touch you


in its lifeless form
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mia
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since 07-06-99
Posts 120


1 posted 07-21-99 10:01 AM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mia

Starfish...
very nice... I'm not sure what it means for you but it ressembles a whole lot how feel about my boyfriend... My poems just don't touch him like I would want them to...I mean, he's a really deep person...an artist eaven, just not a man of many words. My life revolves around words (probably too much) and it makes me real sad that i am unable to touch him. Would you mind if I sent it to him? Maybe then he would get it...

mia
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


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Wow.....I really liked this one. Just enough said to make the reader think and not too little said to keep them wondering of your intentions. Good work!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
 
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