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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

0 posted 1999-07-20 08:51 PM

( I wrote this the other day as I watched the storm roll in, more of a prose type poem and strickly inpromptu)

Your Storm

I stand before the open window,
raising my arms in the air;
the coolness of the breeze,
just before the rain comes,
washes over my skin in waves.
The air is charged with electric,
so full of energy.
The storm approaching in the distance
teases me with it's nearness.
A flash of light peaks
above the tree tops
and the soft roar of thunder follows.
I wait,
longing for the rain.
Soft drops begin to fall
from the now darkened sky;
the breeze blows them gently
against my bare flesh,
their coolness sizzling
on my hot skin.
I feel your hand upon my shoulder,
turning me into you.
I glance whistfully into your eyes
seeing a storm all your own
reflected there...
you pull me towards you
and together we make thunder.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

1 posted 1999-07-20 08:55 PM

I Call it free verse. And I also call it good.

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

2 posted 1999-07-20 09:03 PM

Yes, we do seem to be on the same track. I enjoyed your poem as well.

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

3 posted 1999-07-20 10:06 PM

Very good, I liked the direction of this poem, and the end was captivating. Great job.

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-07-20 10:12 PM

Very beautiful, hoot. Sounds like the right guy answered your personal ad!

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-07-20 10:25 PM

Thanks everyone for your comments.
Balladeer, just wishful thinking on my part...nothing wrong with dreaming!!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2005-06-19 12:56 PM

Hi Ruth, just doing some archive diving tonight, this was a lovely piece, and I loved the ending.

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