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Ohme
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Repast

Close behind me,
I heard its restless rustle
and offered it starvation.
Yet it would feed on me.
I let it dine.

There beside me,
I failed to hear the seething
of bubbles of elixir
and I did drink my fill
of perfect wine.

Now before me,
are only dirty dishes
and food that has no flavor
inviting me to sup
another time.

While within me
I feel an endless hunger
to feast upon and savor
bounty from a table
I never find.
© Copyright 1999 Lorene Meadows - All Rights Reserved
Andrew Scott
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1 posted 07-20-99 07:09 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

I'm reading something here, but I'm not sure what it is. My first impression is vampiric, but even that doesn't feel right. I like it, but I just can't put my finger on what "it" is. A little help in understanding the deeper meaning if you please. Thanks.
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I agree....vampiric in nature...and beautifully haunting.
elvira
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...hm...i thought it was about a void in the soul that we are all trying to fill...then again, perhaps i am wrong?

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Ohme
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4 posted 07-20-99 07:28 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Sorry, Andrew, Perhaps I need to work on it further so it will have more clarity. The positions of 'it' changes over time. Think of 'it' as a relationship.
In the past it gnaws and is irritating.

Beside was to symbolize the good times of the relationship, when the wine was perfect.

Now the relationship is over, dirth dishes, but the memories of the relationship produce a desire for another relationship, a table never found.

I'll work on it and try again.
Thanks for you opinion


~one voice~
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5 posted 07-20-99 07:29 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Ohme, oh my...you are VERY talented! I love this piece...it says so much to me! I am looking forward, impatiently, to read more of your work!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Andrew Scott
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6 posted 07-20-99 07:34 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Please... Don't change a thing! It's perfect, let it stand! I knew it was something deeper, I just couldn't find it within my own befuddled mind. Thanks for the clarification. Now I like it even more, so much more than I can say. Great job!
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I agree, Great job!
Ohme
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8 posted 07-20-99 07:45 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Thanks for the pat on the back, Guys. Perhaps I will leave it as it is. Glad you liked it.
 
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