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Open Poetry #1

Prayer

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

0 posted 1999-07-19 10:41 PM

Gods of sorrow
hear my plight
remove my saddness
from thy sight.

Gods of laughter
heed my plea
return the joy
that so recently was
a part of me.

Gods of hope and desire,
harken to my cry,
bring me the dream
yet unknown to my heart
and unknown to mine eye.

Gods of lust and spirt,
stoke in me the fire
of will, grace, and life
to woo the soul my love
to bring my heart's desire.

Hear my prayers
my gods of hedon's life
feel my needs my lords
fuel my soul, feed my heart
replenish my angst with your power.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-07-19 10:49 PM

You will probably do well with this piece, short, to the point. Although the beginning does flow like doggerel, there is some redemption in the end.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

2 posted 1999-07-20 01:22 AM

Tripe and spiteful backlash.

Nary a comment on content.

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

3 posted 1999-07-21 11:31 AM

Okay,

This is another "morning after" realization:

No more posting poems at god-awful hours of the night after 12-15 too many beers.... I have a hard enough time writing decent stuff without THOSE influences....

I'll be a good boy from now on, I promise.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 1999-07-21 03:10 PM

JP,
Now what fun would you be if you were a good boy, huh? Think on that one for a while and let me know. *smiles*
I also love the writing as of late.

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