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Sundance
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since 1999-07-11
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0 posted 1999-07-19 09:55 PM


Life in such a fragile thing,
don't leave it alone,for it has wings.
Don't ever play with it for fun,
for it will frighten the person.
So let your life go on,
for it will come and go,
so fast you won't even know.

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Sundance
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since 1999-07-11
Posts 123

1 posted 1999-07-20 12:50 PM


I need some feedback, how is it?

Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30
Posts 444
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2 posted 1999-07-20 01:05 PM


A nice statement of life being like a creek, and instead of fighting the flow, row the boat the way you want to go. Perhaps that comes close? But it was good, and bravo.
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