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Imaginary World

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 07-19-99 05:38 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Imaginary World

You attempt to serve me
melted poison ice cream
on a disposable candy spoon.
You terrorize me
with your cynical smile.
I shiver frightfully
unaware of my pending doom.

Lost in my imaginary world
where flightless bodies
seem to soar above me,
where visions on the TV screen
enter my world as reality,
where I analyze you like a robot
trying to program you to respond,
where as everyday passes
I fall deeper into my imaginary world.

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Saxoness
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1 posted 07-19-99 08:14 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

this one was interesting......not really sure of the subject......
Poet deVine
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2 posted 07-19-99 10:35 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

There's something about this poem that I really like. Can't put my finger on it.. it's not the usual type of poetry I like. I guess it's like a Stephen King novel....
Lost Dreamer
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Thanks for the reply Saxoness, & Poet deVine
Now I will explain I wrote this about my Father-in-law who was on morphine due to terminal cancer. I wrote it in his perspective, but the way I was seeing it and feeling it at the time. I happen to be the lucky one to be without a job at the time, so I was the one there to jump at his commands. It was only 3 months, but felt like a year.
Starfish
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4 posted 07-20-99 06:50 AM       View Profile for Starfish   Email Starfish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starfish

I really like this poem - it grabs me as it drifts from reality into the imagination. It sounds like it was a hard time for you by your father's side and I admire you for standing by him.
Lost Dreamer
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5 posted 07-20-99 05:29 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Thank-You Starfish, I really appreciate your thoughts.
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