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~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

0 posted 1999-07-19 02:10 PM

What can I say? I have my doubts.
Which way is it? In or out?
Up or down?
Or all around?
My dear, you need to choose a route
for one cannot be found.

Give me love or leave my side.
Unknowing I cannot abide.
What should I do?
I feel so blue.
Please don't take away my pride,
or let me sit and rue.

I need to know you love me still.
I need to know you love at will.
Might you kiss me?
Might you miss me?
Must you give me such a chill?
Don't leave me...don't leave me.

©~onevoice~

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Sundance
Member

since 1999-07-11

Posts 123

1 posted 1999-07-19 02:19 PM

Very nice! I like it, I've written a poem like that before, but it wasn't nearly as good. My spelling and word vocabulary, are very limited. I look forward to more!!!

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

2 posted 1999-07-19 02:22 PM

Thank you Sundance! You should post that poem!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

dimples22
Junior Member

since 1999-07-15

Posts 30

3 posted 1999-07-19 02:46 PM

I don't know what to say but I like it a lot.

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

4 posted 1999-07-19 03:03 PM

The question begs an answer. The narrator starts out strong in their demands, but in the end they are brought to their knees begging. It's unfortunate that all to often we find ourselves in such a position. I hope they answer soon.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

5 posted 1999-07-19 04:24 PM

Thanks dimps, and Andrew...just threw this together really...but thanx for your support!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

6 posted 1999-07-19 05:29 PM

i loved the line "My dear, you need to choose a route"...very original that

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Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

7 posted 1999-07-19 10:06 PM

And elvira, thank you, as well!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

8 posted 1999-07-20 06:12 AM

Never would I leave you, never.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

Princess Lily
Member

since 1999-07-13

Posts 149
USA

9 posted 1999-07-30 12:44 PM

Lovely-thought i'd bring oldies to the top

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

10 posted 1999-07-30 12:51 PM

And I thank you for bringing this up, Princess Lily! Wonderful, one voice. I really like this one.

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*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

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