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My Wish My Angel
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My Wish My Angel |
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swilke1 New Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 5Metamora,IL,USA |
My Wish, My Angel One summer night I wished upon a star, And prayed to God, To see and angel either close or far The summers came and went, The stars began to fall, The wish I'd wished, faded and bent Till the day, I got my wish, My prayer was answered, An Angel came my way My Wish, My Angel Is more that an dream It fills me up, through all the seems I feel no pain, and have no fear When My Angel is near I wished my wish, and prayed to God, That one summer night And here you are My Wish, My Angel **this is only my second poem so suggestions are recommended*** thank-you for looking |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
sweet contend...(do you read your poetry aloud to "proof read" so to speak?...that's my only advice...hope you don't mind constructive criticism)...looking forward to more postings from you  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
very nice, innocent thoughts sometimes make the best poems,.........although, proofreading is often neccessary. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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swilke1 New Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 5Metamora,IL,USA |
Thank-you for the input. i will take it as it comes. That is how it happened. I gave it a try. I will try again someday. Thanks again for reading it. |
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