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DreamEvil
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0 posted 1999-07-18 09:10 PM


I have never felt loved so strongly,
As I do when I'm with you.
I stumbled through my life so blindly,
Close to bidding this life adieu.

Then by random chat and happenstance,
Some old yearnings did arise.
A friend showed me the forum by chance,
Now I live for the replies.

The first of them I met was one voice,
A true lady, mild and sweet.
After I knew her I had no choice,
My heart admitted defeat.

Azblond has been there for me you know,
Despite my being impure.
Sometimes she reminds me of a doe,
Skittish, nervous and unsure.

The next would be a true kindred soul,
A beauty in her own right.
Isabelle, Izzy, or so I'm told,
Don't lose that girlish delight.

My newest Lady is Saxoness,
She will be a lovely friend.
I met her today I must confess,
Any more on her will depend.

There is but one more tale to be told,
a verse for my protege.
The delight of my night, Gentle Soul,
who brightens my life each day.

Lastly, we come to Lady deVine,
Grande dame of erotic verse.
Her words hit the brain like a dry wine,
Leaving you with greater thirst.

For any I've forgotten to craft rhyme,
It fills me with such sorrow.
It was not for lack of time,
You'll have one on the morrow.

©1999 DreamEvil


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Being paranoid is the biggest reason I'm still around to practice my paranoia.
DreamEvil©



[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-18-99).]

© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 1999-07-18 09:17 PM


A very nice tribute, DreamEvil!

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..And down from the eternal heavens comes fate's jewelled fingertips, it's magic flowing into awaiting souls..--Krista Knutson


*Krista Knutson*



Poet deVine
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2 posted 1999-07-18 09:20 PM


This is by far your best! (Though I take exception to being called 'yours'!) Be careful, you may have to change your name to DreamSweet if this trend keeps up! (Thank you for including me.)


Sunshine
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3 posted 1999-07-18 09:22 PM


Not that I'm expecting
any words so fine
but now you know I'm looking
and you'll be on my mind.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Saxoness
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4 posted 1999-07-18 09:58 PM


thank you........what else can I say? Not sure how to accept it. Hope you understand me.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

~one voice~
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5 posted 1999-07-18 10:29 PM


Wonderful tribute Dream...well said. ~one voice~
Balladeer
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6 posted 1999-07-18 10:56 PM


A very nice tribute, Dream.
Gentle Soul
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7 posted 1999-07-18 11:14 PM


*hugs*
Ohme
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8 posted 1999-07-19 12:38 PM


Very nice. I like the way you addressed the situation, with no sense of betraying one by moving on to the other. And of course you promise to include anyone who feels left out no later than tomorrow. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Ohme

DreamEvil
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9 posted 1999-07-19 12:42 PM


Thank you and thanks to deVine,
somehow she found the time,
to help me organize my rhyme.

elvira
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10 posted 1999-07-19 02:04 AM


DreamEvil the romantic?...i must say, i like both sides of you

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Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...



Dragon
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11 posted 1999-07-19 02:51 AM


Very Nice! More please!!
DreamEvil
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12 posted 1999-07-19 03:40 AM


Talk about ROCKING!! This one surprises the bejesus out of me.

IsabelleSkye
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13 posted 1999-07-19 09:26 PM


I am flattered that you included me, and even more by your rhyme! *blush*
What a sweetie you are
I see no evil here I fear....
What I see and hear
all lead me to believe
that you are sweet DreamEvil
(ok ok ok I can't rhyme, but it was the thought that counts!!! eh? )
*hugs*
Izzy

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Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads.....Henry David Thoreau

DreamEvil
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14 posted 1999-07-19 09:51 PM


As unforgettable as you are, Izzy, I couldn't leave you out.

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-19-99).]

JP
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15 posted 1999-07-19 10:22 PM


Forced. Well felt, well meant, and well thought in some places, although overall, it was forced.
DreamEvil
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16 posted 1999-07-19 10:34 PM


Forced, how so? The feelings are genuine, each verse describes the object well. Perhaps you merely write in a different style. I appreciate the comments and will look into your work with equal depth and scrutiny.
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