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~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

0 posted 1999-07-18 04:13 AM


The delicate words that spill off your tongue,
that you whisper to me in my dreams
are heard like a symphony inside my heart.
You turn my brooding in to chocolate romance
with your kisses sweet like mother's milk.
Simple moments with you I crave to last an eternity...
Though I always must return to my sordid life...

You listen to the stories I recount...

I tell you how I light the flames
and how he blows out the candles...
I tell you how I long for recognition
when he leaves me in the shadows.
You listen to the times that I've been vexed,
frustrated, and angered...

I tell you how I've built the walls
to keep from falling down.
You listen as I share with you
my lonesomeness
that I make for myself
-because it's easier in that fashion.

But when I'm finished with my recounts;
when your task of attending to me is almost through,
I find my armour falling down
in a pile at my feet.

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©~onevoice~

"There are chords in the hearts of the most wreckless which cannot be touched without emotion."




[This message has been edited by ~one voice~ (edited 07-18-99).]

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-07-18 04:19 AM


Sweet relief, wonderful,dear. Remarkable. On a personal level, that's what I'm here for. Thank you for your gifts to me, verse and otherwise.

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Being paranoid is the biggest reason I'm still around to practice my paranoia.
DreamEvil©


~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA
2 posted 1999-07-18 04:20 AM


Anything for the Dream... ~one voice~
azblond
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since 1999-07-01
Posts 637
The Steamy Desert
3 posted 1999-07-18 04:27 AM


Can you hear me clapping??!! Great one..truly wonderful!

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...



Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 1999-07-18 03:22 PM


Great work. I enjoyed your descriptive lines, especially this one: "You turn my brooding in to chocolate romance
with your kisses sweet like mother's milk."

dimples22
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since 1999-07-15
Posts 30

5 posted 1999-07-18 04:04 PM


This is by far one of your best poems yet.
dimples22
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since 1999-07-15
Posts 30

6 posted 1999-07-18 04:05 PM


This is by far one of your best poems yet.
~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA
7 posted 1999-07-18 07:40 PM


Thank you thank you thank you!! I had fun writing this piece! I am so glad that you liked it! ~one voice~
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