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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-07-18 03:42 AM

Ladies are like fine diamonds, each with
a different cut and brilliance all her own.
With avid care my imagination will reach to
Compare them to that glittering stone.

When you enter a jewelry store, look about,
See the wonders to be found.
Sparkling desire and radiant fire spin out
In a web that holds you spellbound.

Color, clarity, cut, so many things to decide
Before you make your choice.
With so many pretty pleasures, I must confide
They speak to me with one voice.

Only one diamond will ever catch your eye,
On that you may depend.
Hold your lover tightly, tell her nightly why,
Your love she does transcend.

©1999DreamEvil

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Being paranoid is the biggest reason I'm still around to practice my paranoia.
DreamEvil©

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-18-99).]

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-07-18 03:45 AM

This would make any woman swoon! I'm sure I'm not the only one out there! Dream, your words are so beautiful whether they be dark or light...they all come from your heart. Which must mean, love, that you have a truly beautiful soul. ~one voice~

[This message has been edited by ~one voice~ (edited 07-18-99).]

azblond
Senior Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

2 posted 1999-07-18 03:49 AM

Now you are talking! As the woman of the world I am (hah...like anyone believes that for a second!!), this speaks so totaly to my heart, giving me respect for you like never before. This is such a turn from your "vicious females" side we saw a few days ago, my hope in you renewed once more. See...even the Dark sparkles in Moonlight!Bravo my friend...Bravo!

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

3 posted 1999-07-18 03:52 AM

I did good then?

azblond
Senior Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

4 posted 1999-07-18 03:57 AM

*pat on the head* you did REAL good honey!!

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...

Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

5 posted 1999-07-18 05:08 AM

You did very good!!!!! Loved it!

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

6 posted 1999-07-18 10:01 AM

Thank you all.

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

7 posted 1999-07-18 10:43 AM

This is good I hope you keep stretching your talent into different directions. We should all vary our style now and then. One sign of a good poet is that he/she can be diverse! Dont' abandon that which is dear to your heart (darkness), but don't be afraid to spread your wings!

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

8 posted 1999-07-18 12:50 PM

This poem is quite good..........only one thing about it bothers me........(actually 2) the last word in the last line od stanza 2, spellbound, seems to fit oddly. not sure why. also, the thoughts are a bit fractured, the stanzas are not concentrated. However. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, if it is what you were going for. I'm just used to a more even flow. As far as individual stanzas, the flow is superb. Very, very nice. I like it!

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

9 posted 1999-07-18 01:17 PM

I liked this one, I was not gonna read it at first cause I thought maybe you wrote on the dark side which personally does not appeal to me, but that's just me I am only one person. I am glad I decided to open this one and read it, you did a wonderful job in your descriptions.

dimples22
Junior Member

since 1999-07-15

Posts 30

10 posted 1999-07-18 04:07 PM

Now why can't I find a man who can write something like that for me. LOL, you did a terrific job.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 1999-07-18 06:48 PM

Simply refreshing. I'm looking forward to yet more from your vast wealth of insight.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

12 posted 1999-07-18 07:53 PM

Thank you, all of you.

Moonlight
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

13 posted 1999-07-18 10:47 PM

Very nice, Dreamevil. I like it. The last stanza is my favorite by far.... good advice too.

~m~

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

14 posted 1999-07-19 12:32 PM

Thank you, dear ladies, one and all,
for hearing the call
of desire that lead me
to be inspired.

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-19-99).]

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