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Poet deVine
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0 posted 1999-07-17 10:04 PM




In darkness, I brood about the task at hand
for my death will free this noble land
the final walk from this lonely tower
will signal more than my final hour

The bravest that I will ever be
is when I face my eternity
blood on my hands, guilt on my soul
my death will then make me whole

The battle lost, I pay for our sins
but who’s to say which of us wins
my death will make a martyr of me
the price I pay to let men live free

Fear flutters in my heart at the last
with hooded face, my die is cast
trembling, crying, awaiting the shroud
I hang before the cheering crowd.

(Thanks for the challenge, DreamEvil!)

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Severn
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1 posted 1999-07-17 10:20 PM


This is really interesting. Is this metaphoric for your own life right now, or a sympathetic look at the the greatest sacrifice? Lovely imagery, fortified by strong, eloquent wording.
DreamEvil
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2 posted 1999-07-17 10:20 PM


Anytime, Lady deVine, it was truly a pleasure
without compare.

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Being paranoid is the biggest reason I'm still around to practice my paranoia.
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Poet deVine
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3 posted 1999-07-18 12:08 PM


Severn, I was challenged by DreamEvil to write a poem using the phrase: In darkness I brood.

This is the result of that challenge. I put it on paper and let my creativity do the rest.

I appreciate your comments! Thanks.

elvira
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since 1999-07-06
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4 posted 1999-07-18 12:23 PM


makes me think of british kings, and i do love history

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