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I wana go to nana's house

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mannie
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0 posted 07-17-99 07:47 PM       View Profile for mannie   Email mannie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mannie

I want to go to Nana's house. My nana make me laugh.

She reads to me and sings to me and make's me take a bath.

My nana is so cudly, so soft and nice and round. I alway gives her lots of hugs, but my arms won't go around.

Sometimes she take me to the park and somedays we just go for walks. I love to spend time with her and listen to her talk. I love my Nana

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Ohme
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1 posted 07-17-99 08:23 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

I followed the meter of the first 2 lines easily. However there was a change in the meter of the following lines that made it more dificult for me to follow. Over all
Very nice. Everyone should have a Nanna.

Poet deVine
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2 posted 07-17-99 08:26 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

God, I hope you aren't a pilot (your profile listed airline as your profession)!

Misspelled words detract from poetry, so if I were you, I'd fix those.

Do you read your poem out loud before you post, that would help with the rhythm/meter.


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