Obscure at Best - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #1

Obscure at Best

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 1999-07-16 08:51 PM

When writing I try not to be
dim, or vague, or filled with uncertainty
tho my indistinctness sometimes comes through
it was not to hide anything from you.

Sometimes, of course, I’m indefinable,
ambiguous, shadowy and deep
but my unclear thoughts are not concealed
or in darkness shall you I keep.

And my remote ways when talking of oblivion
keep you doubtful nevertheless;
but never fear, I’m not double-faced
I’m just known for my fuzziness.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

------------------
Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Genea
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 321
USA

1 posted 1999-07-17 11:17 AM

good but last line of 2nd stanza sounds forced.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.