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tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

0 posted 1999-07-16 03:45 PM


I stay awake each night, sleep forbid,
'tis far, from my weary mind
I ache, before moon light rests, to sunlight crest
Oh 'tis a bitter sweet line,
that comes slower each day, in time,
with you,
still
in
my
mind

You said you care, yet did not dare, to give your anguished scope
As I in quest, to do my best, still, hold on to hope

Every corner I go around I look, but do not see
And every letter that I receive, I find myself looking for thee

Yet, never once, did I dare to stop the dream
Even in somber, angered mist, as I wait for moon lights rest
fists clenched in rage, I see you, closer to God with me

As my wondering thoughts go to a wave less sea,
that floats me to the grave
Never, have I faced such truth, until, that darkened day
You said you love me, forever more, 'twas then you went away

"How My God" do I decipher, this,
what did I not see
Then back I go to my wondering thoughts
drifting further out to sea

You see, the day's have no nights, as the nights they have no day's
Its thoughts of a long ago passionate kiss
That carry me away, floating in a wave less sea ,
That takes me to my grave

In hopes of fulfilling, that begotten dream of a place that we
may be,
Where streets are lined with solid gold
Where peace will set us free
I pledge mine love to thee.

tori 99
All help on this one Welcomed!

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If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
vlh.



© Copyright 1999 Victoria Hosier/tori - All Rights Reserved
blueloon
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161
NY
1 posted 1999-07-16 05:09 PM


For I am not one that can help...but I can encourage... This piece is moving and strong. You have a way with minipulating the reader which is great! I can't wait to read this as a "finished product"
blueloon

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