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Malisa, My Angel

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blueloon
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0 posted 07-16-99 09:47 AM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for blueloon

Dinner, he forgot.
He dined with another.
Slowly I cried myself
to sleep.

A baby cries,
cries within.
A woman yells,
yells within.
The baby speaks...
the woman takes
from her breast and
slowly she starts to feed.

The roots connect.
I feel it here.
I wonder where
this all began.

Two people start
another.
But that one
will start with two
and together
they'll make
one.

Malisa, she spoke to me..
She touched my face
and painted me gold.
She put dust in my eyes
as she spoke,
"Name the child ,
and love it kind.
He is hers
and you are mine."

I awoke to hear a
cricket scream of
pure delight or
is it pain a
song or
chant?

I look Over yonder as
day breaks.
Someone will come.
Only time will tell as
night continues to pass on
as the baby speaks
I reveal my breast and
slowly start to feed.




[This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-16-99).]
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lenny
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1 posted 07-16-99 10:00 AM       View Profile for lenny   Email lenny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lenny

He sounds unworthy. Sad...
quote99
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2 posted 07-16-99 11:33 AM       View Profile for quote99   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quote99

I don't feel the meter or hear the rhyme on this one.
blueloon
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3 posted 07-16-99 04:30 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

quote99: I'm not sure if I was aiming for a pattern, the words they came from deep within and this is what appeared. I did make a change and welcome the feedback.
Thank you- blueloon

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